Letter to My Mother

In light of the Thanksgiving season, I couldn't help thinking how grateful I am for the life of my mother. This is the poem that transpired.

Thank you

Such a simple phrase

But yet, when said sincerely

It portrays the greatest praise

 

So thank you

For the prayers you’ve shared

For the times you spent

Holding me when I was scared

 

Thank you

For the words of truth

So easily taught

In the times of my youth

 

Thank you

For the service you’ve shown

The inspiration you’ve shared

It will be with me e’en when I’m grown

 

Thank you

For easing the mind of

A young troubled heart

You were the peace in our home; the dove

 

Thank you

For your example. You’ve shown the way

To live my life correctly

To look forward to another new day

 

Though I can no longer see you

Touch you

Hug you

Talk to you

I can still say Thank you

 

You are now the angel of the heavens

As you were the angel of my heart

Thank you, dear mother

For loving me from the start.

 

I cannot wait to see you

In the life after this

Between the golden gates

I wait for your hug and a kiss

 

So thank you,

One last time

For giving me hope of the future

In this darkest of times

 

Thank you

Such a simple phrase

But in this letter

It is the greatest of praise

Author's Note

This one is extremely close to my heart. My mom passed away just a few months ago, so the feelings are still very real and tender.
Honest reviews are greatly appreciated! :)

Award(s):

Second ~ "Thank you" contest
My Favorite ~ "Favorite Poems" contest
Sixth ~ "Bittersweet Memories" contest
written perfectly ~ "All types of poetry" contest

Reviews

[Summer'sBreeze]

Aww, Ally. ;_; I'm sad to say I've never got to read this beforehand.

It's a lovely poem dedicated to your mother.
Such strong love here in this poem.

Wonderfully written.

[.]

great poem really.......it has so sentiment's....emotions....when i was reading it,i saw ur's starting portion was fullfill with ur's feling's...then when i read out futher that mean's when i reached at middle portion,{i was(hug u , talk u, touch u,}then the line'S that i'd read out from "THE ANGEL OF MY HEART TO ENDING PORTION"..i was being emtional really ........then i read ur's "AUTHOR'S NOTE".....
really u've increadable feeling's for ur mother that's now in heaven.....now ur mom is seeing u that her daughter is so nice & growing with new skill's.....u've really such a nice feeling's...u'd made me emotional.....i know one day u b the great + awesome writer......i'd then read out ur's profil...u r of 16 (a preety princess,offcourse other princess's jealous's u... (:-))
i've read out ur's poem , ur's writing way is perfectly nice,ur mom'd prouding on u...that her daughter won't ever forget her mother.....u r a nice girl/daughter of ur mom.......i've few word's to u ........if u don;t mind then have a look below...
"LETTER TO MY MOTHER,
MOM...I'M UR'S PREETY DAUGHTER,
WHY U'D LEFT MY PATH,
BUT ..I KNOW U'D LEFT ME HERE,THEREBY U COULD ABLE TO GIVE ME LIGHT ON EACH & EVERYSTEP THAT I'LL STEP AHEAD,
I KNOW U R SEEING ME FROM HEAVEN'S NATURE,
U WANT TO SEE ME AT THE EDGE OF BRIGHTNESS...... COZZZ.....I'M UR'S DAUGHTER,
I PROUD TO U THAT I'M UR'S DAUGHTER,
I PROUD TOO ON MYSELF THAT U R MY MOM THAT' ALWAY'S TWINKLE,
U EVERYDAY SEE ME FROM HEAVEN & GIFT ME BLESS OF BLINKLE'S,
I'M THE ONLY ONE ON THIS EARTH THAT HAS AN HEAVEN MOM,
THAT EAT WITH ME,
TALK WITH ME,
SLEEP WITH ME,
HUG ME,
BLESS'S ME,
HAPPY ME,
AWAKE ME,
KISS ME,
SAVE ME......& STAY WITH ME IN MY DOME,
U'VE SHOWED ME THE RIGHT WAY,
I DO ALWAY'S GOD-PRAY,
U START'S MY ALL DAY'S,..EVERYDAY,
AS A SUN'S MORNING SHINE'S THAT MAKE'S ME AWAKE.....
I'M THE ONLY UR'S DAUGHTER,
THAT HAS HER HEAVEN'S MOTHER.......
I DON'E EVER MISS U AFTER DAY ANOTHER,
COZ......THERE'S NO NEED TO MISS U MY MOTHER,
U'VE ALREADY WITH ME AS A LIGHT;
AS A SUNSHINE,
AS A SMILE,
AS A FLY,
AS A STAR'S NIGHT'S.,
AS A EVERYMORNING LIGHT'S,THAT MAKES ME SO BRIGHT,
COZ.......THIS IS ONLY DUE TO U MY MOTHER,
THAT I'M BREATHING RATHER,
U R MY SHELTER,
COZ....U LIVE'S IN MY HEART'S & WONDER'S,
I'M UR'S DAUGHTER,
I'LL NEVER FORGET U MY MOTHER......"
I hope that u'd love it...this poem arised from my sentiment's.....
.....i just wanna give u 99/100....ur poem has touched my heart really.......
may god gift u a nice + successive path........u r special in the world....
take-care........
have a cheerful day........

[A. L. Allen]

Wow. I don't know what to say. Thank you so kcuh for the kind, thoughtful review. I'm glad that I was able to touch your heart. :)
Thank you for reminding me that my mom's always looking out for me. It's good to hear that fronapmeone else other than myself sometimes.
Thanks again!

-A. L.

[A. L. Allen]

*much*
*from someone*

[.]

ahh....it's cool...it was just arised out from my heart....i've a fella that has my feeling's...so...ur poem made me emotional....even ur feeling's for ur's mom are much better+nice+beautiful+awesome+best+charmig than my word's....it's even my great pleasure that u've read out my thought's & loved.....i was worried after send the msg coz.......i was thinking that may b u could take it hurtly....but i loved it...it's so nice....surely.....ur's mom was/is very honourful lady that she had given u such good thinking's.....i'd wish that she'll make u very good person.........
have a nice day......take-care...!!

[.]

yeah..u r absolutely right that ur mom is seeing u from the heaven.....even believe me ur mom living in ur's heart....
be happy....make urself so successful in ur life so that ur mom'd feel proudneess....& say to other's that "THAT'S MY PREETY DAUGHTER.."

[Archia]

Ohhh that is so beautiful and touching. Really nice.

[Katie]

I can definitely feel the pain and hurt. flowed beautiful with the repetition, (as others have said) and emotion is keyed in her perfectly. sorry for your loss, im sure your mother would appreciate this piece written for her.

[Mary C]

nice poem-memories like stars flicker in space and time-

[Kim]

My GOODNESS!! I totally loved this piece,
This is amazing! SO full of feelings and heart tugging.
I love this write so much.

[Amanda Lee/ Isolated Dr..]

This poem has a considerable amount of sentiment: The repetition of the words "thank you" at the beginning of each stanza is powerful;
With praise comes critique: & since you asked for honest reviews; I'd just have to say this--
Trying to evolve from this type of simple clear cut, almost easy rhyme is very difficult to do; (Example-- "shared, scared... phrase, praise") (something I've noticed in my own writing going back a few years) I think this poem would hold so much more power if you can find stronger words; try using slant rhymes or near rhymes; explore the possibility of never having to rhyme exactly, but simply flowing instead. :)

[Maddie:]]

beautiful, very touching! you did a great job of carrying emotion in this piece, as you said yourself its one thats close to your heart and i could definitely feel that throughout the whole piece. writing was and still is a big key to escape these painful feelings for me as well after my own father passed away. very moving, im sure your mother would be proud!

[taylorrose]

beautiful thing to give your mother