Only in your eyes

this is my first one so please don't mind the mistakes

I saw one color

But I don't know the name

When I looked into that

It made me smile

But at the same time made me cry too

I became really excited

But at the same time really terrified too

I don't know what did I feel

But all I really know is that

the color is in your eyes

Yeah only in your eyes

I desperately wanna reach that world

Where you me and only our feelings will stay

Where your dazzling and innocent smile would start my day

Where the sweet song of moon could be heard

No way!

Except in your arms

Yeah only in your arms

I don't know I  would be able to reach that world or not

But all I really know is that

I can see that world in your eyes

Yeah only in your eyes

You may be thinking that I'm becoming crazy

Perhaps thinking that I must have lost my mind

Yeah babe!

Your eyes are making me down

They are making me crazy

They are making me numb

I don't know that I would be able to survive or not

But all I really know is that

I can drown myself a thousand times into the deepest ocean

Which is present in your eyes

Yeah only in your eyes!

 

Reviews

[ICE]

This is a wonderful piece of writing especially for it being your first. It feels more like a song than a poem because of all of the 'yeahs' that were put in. It didn't flow as well as i would've liked it to. Maybe you should try rhyme scheme to make it flow better. All in all I thought that you did a great job! Keep writing!

~Ice

[Shalini Dinesh]

lovely poem, each one loves to look into their lovers eyes, nice presentation, i enjoyed reading every line ......

you can take a look at my poem called " I can SEE" when you find time and give your comments...

keep writing.