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A Poem by Audrie

The words sliced through her soul

leaving paper cut  size wounds~ 

tiny universes of stinging, burning pain~

 

The wounds were too small to stitch

so she just wrapped it up with one gauze bandage

and drenched it in faint memories of happiness~

 

So now we'll pretend and act as if she is healed~

we'll pretend she has no memory~

We'll make sure she cannot feel~

© 2010 Audrie


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so she just wrapped it up with one gauze bandage
and drenched faint memories of happiness

Bitter sweet memories usually hold the most value for they are the one that makes us stronger and define our character. Great work.

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Posted 14 Years Ago


A powerful poem. The details were strong in every line. I like the whole poem. No wasted words. I like the ending. Left me with a emptiness. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

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Posted 14 Years Ago


I really liked this. Gave me an eerie feel. Only thing I thought didn't make too much sense was her getting a "paper cut wound" as large as "the universe." Kind of doesn't make sense, you get my dritf? :P lol. Paper cuts are typically small and burn a little, i'm sure you've gotten one as well as i! Otherwise, I give this poem 100/100 :) good job, nice form!

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Posted 14 Years Ago


I see utter pain! It's like trying to become blind by way of useless methods... so sad. Be blessed

jkb

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Audrie

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