when i think about it

having fun with streams of consciousness

when i think about it

when i think about it i am surprised  you hear when i hear about it i am nonplussed to see you were thinking you taste my smell when i smell you thinking the taste is yours and i know it is mine

when i think about it i remember i forgot you yesterday when today i wanted to remember your thinking sends your eyes glazed faraway when i think about it i remember to forget

audrey murray

2015/09/23

Reviews

[J3ssInJupit3r]

What were your thoughts when you wrote this? It kind of reminds me of the Beatles verse "I am he as you are he as you are we and we are all together" It flows and doesn't make sense but some how makes sense all at the same time. It was really nice. I liked it and I liked that I could make the connection to my favorite band. Thank you for sharing.

[Audrey Murray]

hi I answered you earlier but I don't think I clicked on the right button please see my comments in the review box tx

[kmartell]

I know, relate. Might even understand

[h d e rushin]

there is a gossamer, delicate feel to this and I imagine how the sensation of love can be, at first
thought, vertiginous. Being able to say the poem out loud without taking in another breath
is the feeling of telling someone loved, how very much they are.

tremendous write....dana

[Audrey Murray]

thank you dana I appreciate your comments

[Audrey Murray]

thank you Philip I appreciate your comments

[Audrey Murray]

thank you J3ssln I wrote the poem in a workshop a sew years ago found in the other day when I was sorting papers and I tidied it up a little as I recall the exercise directed us to use all of our senses I worked with older people and memory is a huge concern thanks for a great review

[Philip Muls]

Very nice flow of one sentence into the next. Senses and thoughts mixed.

Well done.