Sewn Shut

My heart you pried out,

Clean from my dainty chest,

Thank the stars for diminishing doubt,

As I sew it together; the true test

Of how self love and perseverance 

Can mend everything whole,

Heart, mind, body, and soul. 

Reviews

[Rye]

Very awesome, and so well written. I really enjoyed this,
awesome flow and rhyme scheme.

[audacious]

Thank you!

[emipoemi]

The only thing I need to say about this is that the musicality in the even-numbered stanzas is a bit iffy.

If I may:

-"true" would help the musicality of that line AND add power were it to be changed to "truest"
-"From heart to mind to body to soul"......that adds extra power to the ending (and poem as a whole) AND helps land the musicality on a good note.

This is otherwise stupendous! Well freaking done!

[audacious]

Thank you so much for the feedback!! It means a lot!

[emipoemi]

my pleasure.