That Night

This poem may be triggering to some who have recovered from self-harm or are going through it. View at your discretion.

The cold white walls enclosed me,

A television was the only object in reach

White coat chatter 

echoed the walls

Screams in my mind itched like a flea

"How did I get here?"

This madness seized my mind

The metal frame hugged my body

Along with lacerations on my legs and arms

The doctor said, "I don't want to see you here again"

Petrified, I replied, "You won't" 

That night, I kissed my razors goodbye. 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard journey described. You made the reader believe every words. I liked the flow of thoughts led to a hopeful ending. Thank you Amanda for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Riddhi]

I liked that you were positive..I can understand the pain but girl you are indeed brave and courageous that you are trying to rise above it now..Writing is the best way we can forget all our stress , pain and agony and I hope that it will help you heal all your injuries in your heart so that you can start afresh again...
You expressed it well in this piece..
Keep on writing...

[Kelly Scheppers]

You chose to rise above it...good for you! Stay positive and be strong. Writing can be a most powerful catharsis! Good to meet you, Amanda!

[Amanda Trerotola]

Yes, definitely did. Thank you for your kind words. Nice to meet you too and thank you for reading!

[Chris Shaw]

Takes courage, so well done you. Your poem nicely composed.

Chris

[Amanda Trerotola]

Thank you, Chris. This means a lot.

-Welcome to my page!

[Chris Shaw]

I'll look out for more of your work.

[Amanda Trerotola]

Thank you! I will do the same for you. :)

I actually want to create a poetry book, but we will see.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Self harm is a sensitive subject to address - you have approached this in a poetically poignant and sympathising way. Good write … and … interesting read! :-)

[Amanda Trerotola]

Aw thank you! I tried my very best to address it in a manner that wasn't too gruesome.

read moreAw thank you! I tried my very best to address it in a manner that wasn't too gruesome.

-Welcome to my page.

[Neville]

As cold and clinical as it can get... these words resonate & cut deep.. very well crafted in my humble opinion... fine words indeed & hopefully, lessons learned .... Neville

[Amanda Trerotola]

Thank you for reading. Definetely a lesson learned.

[Neville]

good to hear, onwards and upwards my friend.... Neville

[wordman]

good for you,a sad feeling

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Amanda, your poem is so honest and raw. The b&w picture is as stark as the experience you went through. I applaud your courage and your strong spirit of survival. From abyss to transcendance, you rose and won. “I kissed my razors goodbye.” Stay healthy and beautiful my friend. Brava!!

[Amanda Trerotola]

This means so much to me. Thank you, truly.

[AizenJ]

Whoa!! Amazing and powerful imagery. I don't know if this happened to you or not but, I commend the persona for kissing the razors goodbye. Such bravery and courage. Simple but well written. ^_^

[Amanda Trerotola]

Thank you very much. I am so happy it was that impactful. This poem did happen in my life.

[AizenJ]

Oh I see. Yes, it has a very strong impact and I commend your recovery. Well done. Keep your head up. ^_^

[Ally Ann]

Wow. This piece really got to me. You managed to create a clear picture with your descriptions, and the honesty and directness of your words struck me (in the best way possible). I truly believe that the best poems come from unfiltered truth and you managed to capture that. Thanks for sharing!

[Amanda Trerotola]

It is my pleasure to share! I am so happy it struck you in a good way. Your review means a lot!