The immortals

  The Immortals

 

When the heinous winds rides the land

marching from the death valley

When the great mountains fail to stand

and the earth dreads in the cyclone's rally.

 

 

When the deafening clouds bangs

poisoning the world with their fangs.

When the sun breathes in life

That is when the Immortals rise.

 

The sky fizzle with  their roar

the sea beats the drum at the shore

On seeing the immortals with their arms

the heinous winds lies calm.

 

With their hands many sores get healed

With their arms many souls get revived

With their rise the sun breathes out life

With their fall ...the firmament cries.

Alas!Such Immortals are now hard to find.

 

 

Author's Note

i actually got reminded of something:
"Immortals are those who touch the hearts of millions
Immortals are those who has laid their souls for the sake of millions
Immortals are those who has healed the millions
Immortals are those who are the MORTALS like those millions"
this was the starting part of my speech which was one of the parts of my exams...
it's a dedication to those great peoples who has worked and had strive for humanity..i have tried to make it as better as i can..,if you writers think that there is any mstake in it or anything that could make it batter then please tell me!!

Reviews

[tanmay7551]

Great! This one reminds me of a higher spirit who walks on the earth guiding, healing, preaching and learning the commands of Almighty!

Very well written and good choice of words!

[The dark story]

Thanks for ur uplifting review:)

[Cassie]

This one reminds me of a certain movie i watched about the immortals. This is a good piece, loved reading it.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the word "Immortals." One of the words that myth and great story is based. I like the use of the mountain. Few things can stand forever. I like the energy and drive in the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[The dark story]

Thank you for this uplifting review

[Renée]

Great start to your speech I must say ! One thing Immortals can swing into bad or good...but I realize you mean the good ones...

[The dark story]

thanks

[Sami Khalil]

Whoa . This was a very good read with some powerful meanings...:)

[The dark story]

thanks…

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[InsanityWriter]

Wow! This is really great. ^_^ Good job!! :)

[The dark story]

Thanks I will try to keep it up

[junaid altaf]

the concept is also immortal!

[The dark story]

thanks for this great compliment

[khalid]

i loved how you have penned this great poem. let me say, there have been great leaders along the history of humanity starting from Adam till now. i just have one thing against this, not all imortals are good ones. the Devil is immortal while it is the worst. to be immortal is not a reward, sometimes being immortal is a kind of punishment as what Satan is supposed to be immortal for...

[The dark story]

Oh well I am not able to put my message here clearly…I didn't mean it in the literal sense…I mean to say somebody doesn't become immortal just by being alive for eternity…people like Mother Teresa is counted among immortal because what she has done for humanity is priceless n people still remember her n follow her…she is still alive ib the charity missionaries,in our mind n thoughts n in many schools n in the books.this is what I wanted to express here that all these peoples are mortals but are still immortals!!you draged it in the midst of satan…n I don't think he is immortal…at the time of the Judgenment Day…I believe Allah will punish him as well.
Thanks a lot for the uplifting review.it means a lot!!