Last Words

Last Words

 

 

The Frosty Wind is embracing me

Making me cold and numb.

The Darkness is chasing me

Enshrouding my eyes to the demise

 

My heart’s throbbing is getting fainter

My will is getting weaker.

Now I’m realizing

Slowly and painfully

That my soul is leaving

Slowly and excruciatingly.

 

So before I say farewell

I want you to hear my last words.

Please, listen them carefully

What I’m saying so regretfully.

 

I know I broke your heart

Wounded them with so much scars

 

I know I left you

And the pain I put you through.

 

But I’m sorry

 I never meant to….

meant to hurt you so  deeply

So I beg you…

beg you to please forgive me.

 

Don’t cry

Don’t detest me

Please..forgive me

 

Before my soul

bows before the Death’s hall

I want to see your bright smile

Overshadowing the sun’s light.

 

Before my breath fades away

I want you to adhere on just one way

A way where fragrance of goodness splay

That’s where you must stay…

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

i am an anime-o-holic girl and Naruto is one of my favorite anime.this poem is kinda inspired by my favorite character in it:"Itachi Uchiha" who says farewell to his little brother Sasuke "Forgive me Sasuke..there's no next time"...i hope you'll like it..please tell me mistakes in it..

Reviews

[Laura Maidah]

The caps is fine for elements. WHy is frosty distinguished with caps? It's an adjective, and a common one at that. "to adhere on " is a strange locution, syntax-wise. Theme is abstruse and aural motif was an enigma for me to pronounce mentally. It's not very lucid. Is is eulogistic?

[The dark story]

yes it is!although he doesn't exist....that's so sad:(

[The dark story]

well.i wrote in the review :"The Theme"

[Laura Maidah]

Whoops. I was on a pseudo-browser. It showed in tiny blurs.

[The dark story]

well..i've personified Frosty Wind and The Darkness as the Hell Girl...accoding to japanese mythology...

[zainul]

Wonderful piece.
I enjoyed reading .

[The dark story]

thank you so much....

[zainul]

You are welcome,talented poetess.

[The dark story]

hahahaahahahaha.no it's not so....i'm still learning

[Sarusai Hiryu]

Okay, this is NOT how I would imagine Itachi Uchiha speaking... but as and of itself, the sentiment is rather well-expressed.
By the way, Itachi is one of my favourite characters too.

[The dark story]

oohoho..i am so glad to find on more Naruto fan over here...your profile pic shows that you do like him..thank you so much for your reviews

[eighwoeifj]

I stopped reading Naruto after Itachi died. I was devastated. Absolutely. DEVASTATED.
I liked this a lot and I'm glad I've seen another anime lover on the site.

[The dark story]

oh...that suppose to mean that you too like him..........thank you so much for your review

[eighwoeifj]

Yeah. I loved Itachi a bunch. xD

[ewest1220]

I loved it! The last stanza was absolutely intriguing and really tied everything together. Even though I haven't watched more than two episodes of Naruto. Great work!

[The dark story]

aaaaahhh!!!!!!!!you did watched Naruto...????and thank you so much for your appreciation

[ewest1220]

Well about 2 episodes I'm more into Bleach honestly.

[The dark story]

ohhhhh...bleach is one of my favoufite....but i was able to watch only half of the first season..:(

[ewest1220]

I've seen all 300 and something episodes. Once they finished the original story it got kind of silly. I like Inuyasha as well.

[Akshat♥]

My favorite lines were " I know I broke your heart
Wounded them with so much scars

I know I left you
And the pain I put you through.

But I’m sorry
I never meant to…."

You really penned it well...
I really enjoyed reading it...
Full of emotions...deep feeling is expressed well
Keep writing!! :)

[The dark story]

thank you so much for your reviews......i am glad you ;liked it

[Rika]

Nicely written, i can imagine the scene very well. Nice read.

[The dark story]

thank you.have you seen Naruto?

[Maria]

"Before my soul, bows before the Death’s hall" I love that line! Good job on your poem!

[The dark story]

thank you so much........

[The dark story]

well,Itachi Uchiha was a hero who actually acted as a villain till his death..he slaughtered his own family leaving his little brother and asked him to hate him in order to take revenge on him.it's only in the end that his little brother gets the wind of his true identity.itachi traded honor for dishonor and his lilltle's brother 's love for hatred.and then also he died smiling.this what i've tried to write in this poem ...what itachi wanted to say to his brother Sasuke.and asking for forgiveness that he had lied to him till his death...

[Akhand Pratap Singh]

"I want you to adhere on just one ay" is it "I want you to adhere on just one way"?? its a nice poem, amazing and pic of Itachi makes it even more amazing.. I loved it :) I bet he(Itachi) would have said so as well.

[The dark story]

ooooooooooooooopppppssssss!!!!!!!!!!it was a silly mistake mistake.but yes thank you for your reviews and pointing out that "ay" .............