Big Blue Eyes

Yes. Those beautiful eyes of yours! <3

Staring at me, 

But seeing my soul.

Those big blue eyes,

Find every lie ever told.

Those eyes meant more to me,

'Cuz they showed me where to be.

Showed me heaven and hell,

Cried for me when demons dwelt .

Staring at me,

And giving me hope.

Those big blue eyes,

Helped me to cope.

Every feeling that you tried to hide,

Those eyes of yours, helped me find.

I see your eyes,those big blue eyes,

Everything else is just black and white.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the positive energy of the poetry.
"Staring at me,
And giving me hope.
Those big blue eyes,
Helped me to cope."
We need people to make us feel worthwhile. Thank you Aswin for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank you so much. 😊

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Rashi Jain]

I loved your writing style💕

[GalaxyGhost]

I can imagine a black and white photo of a girl but only her eyes have color in them. It's beautiful!

[SJ Mullins]

Nice rhythm and rhyme, and beautifully written!~

[Harold Mathews]

I enjoyed reading this. It creates a deep feeling.

[SJ Mullins]

I have read three that you have written, and this is by far my favorite. I find to be well written, and enjoyed reading it. Write on! :)

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank you so much . :) Really appreciate you taking your time to read and review my work.

[GreenShoes]

I like it! :) I can hear your rap style when I read it. :)

[Aswin R Prasad]

thank you. Glad that you like it. :)

[Emily]

I loved it!!
I wrote a poem kind of similar to this, it's called 'Dark Blue Eyes'.
Anyway, great poem!
Keep it up!!

[firabelle]

Again, thank you for the read request; I've been needing to get around the site more often and reviewing more things!

AAAW! This poem was a really nice spin on your average romantic poem, because you really share what they have done through a minor detail that many would only give a moment's glance upon meeting this person. (Not going to say girl b/c I don't really know you or this person...) You get the feeling that this very special set of eyes are quite piercing, esp. when you say "Those big blue eyes/ Find every lie ever told". We know that these eyes portray lots of emotion, and can even get pretty scary. (Showed me heaven and hell,/ Cried for me when demons dwelt.)

Speaking of, that last phrase is a little awkward. Unfortunately, I don't know of any phrase that could fix that. :( Sorry, man; I usually try to have fix for the little kinks that I notice and point out in the comments, especially when I read it b/c of a read request.

Your last stanza was a nice flip as well. You know make it about how those eyes have told you about this very special person, not just what these eyes have helped you learn about yourself. We also learn that this someone is not only authoritative at times, ( 'Cuz they showed me where to be), but that this person also has a vulnerable side.

All in all, this was a piece of yours that I really enjoyed! Keep it up, man.

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank you so much for this review. :)
If you like romantic poems, read 'Gravity Plays'. It's one of my old poem. :)

[matpat]

Nice job, keep up the good work!!

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank you.... :)

[zunie frost]

Love the last part it have a really sweet touch. ......

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank you :)