Yes.. I can see them clearly.. They Talk to me, 'They' the scars!
Now the lines have turned to scars, The ones that reminds me of the past! The ones that reminds how many times I've been angry.. Haha.. today I've been angry.. It's something I can't contain! I saw 'em.. the scars .. But today,I could contain! Maybe it's 'cuz some things are not worth the strain .. Even though I'm hurt.. It's good that you've been open about it! It's good to know that I'm not not even worth it! Good to know..Real 'good'..
good poem. at one point you say "The ones that reminds how many times I've been angry "The ones that reminds how many times I've been angry" I think you mean "The ones that remind how many times I've been angry" or "The one that reminds how many times I've been angry" otherwise this was a good read. I really enjoyed it thank you for sharing.
I liked the open thoughts and honest tone in your words.
"Maybe it's 'cuz some things are not worth the strain ..
Even though I'm hurt"
The above is a lesson, all of us must learn. Thank you Aswin for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
1. In the 1st line it should be 'turned into'. That gives a much better composition.
2.I thin.. read more1. In the 1st line it should be 'turned into'. That gives a much better composition.
2.I think using words like cuz' is kind of not preferable in poetry. Try to use full words wherever possible.
3. Try to use I've instead of i've. Always capital I is used to address yourself.
4. Remind instead of reminds.
8 Years Ago
Thought you meant grammatical errors.. Is there actually any ?
And Reminds is correct too in.. read moreThought you meant grammatical errors.. Is there actually any ?
And Reminds is correct too in the context.. ;)
I'll change the 'i' .. thank you :) Much appreciated :)
I'm 18.
I've been writing poems since for a while now..Most of the poems i write are based on my feelings..
The poems i write are mostly unorthodox and i tend to keep it that way! ;)
Also love t.. more..