Rage To The Page

Some things...You just gotta write it off.. :)

I remember when i lost you,

I never wrote,not even a few..

My mind was being crushed from inside,

And I'm not even gonna lie,

I came back home,

turned the music ON and high,

sat there on my bed,

no I would never cry...

Turned the volume so high,

that I can't even listen my mind try,

to think of you,you were just a lie...

"Take that rage,put it on a page,

take the page to the stage,

blow the roof off the place..!"

And the song played on and on and on...

So I took a page,

took my rage,to the page,

And my mind was so engaged !

Relief came to the 'raged' ..

Wrote my mind off on the page,

the things, I've had it rough,

the things I couldn't get off,

From my mind I shut off!

Took the words from my rage,

and with the rage ,raped the page!!

And eased the crave!..

Yeah! I took the rage to the page,

and my mind off the rage!

Author's Note

And that's how i started writing poems! :)
Really would like to read the reviews for this one..
NOTE: Try raping it ;) Sounds better that way! :)
And i think for people who don't like rhymes and raps.. this read might be a little disappointing.. My apologies.. :)
Also it gets kinda like a tongue twister towards the end! ;)

And Sorry for being ambiguous..
"Take that rage,put it on a page,
take the page to the stage,
blow the roof off the place..!"
These are the lines from the song i was listening then ;)
It's from the song "If you could see me now" by "The script"!
I guess you've heard this song or else you surely need to..It's such an inspiring song and this song inspired me to start writing poems and raps!

Reviews

[alifeacoustic]

Before I even got to read the author notes I completely heard this as a rap, which I'm too old to be allowed to like. I heard it as a a kind of spat out rage, kind of like lose yourself in eight mile, where the song only got out because of his determination to prove the doubters wrong.
"Turned the volume so high,
that i can't even listen my mind try,
to think of you,you were just a lie..." Have so been there and done that. It is not a teenage thing btw, I still do that.
You wrote your mind off the page and off the rage perfectly here. Kudos.

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thanks for your kind words and review.. I had a doubt if people would actually take this one in the right sense.. And i'm really glad that you could understand! Thanks again! :)

[Emily]

I love it!
This is one of the reasons why I write too!
Keep up the great work!

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank you :)

[Willard Wells]

The flow was very nice and outside a style, I am not well versed in. Your story within this piece of broken love and getting it out with music and words was very strong. I like it a great deal.

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank you so much. Glad you liked it :)

[Tiffany K Charles]

It's always nice to know the muse of a great writer...... And the rage to the page was just that..... a beautiful way to put out your rage ........

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank you.. Really appreciate it

[Aman samrat khare (ASK)]

Got a nice little hymn there.

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank you! :)

[Solar]

It sounded heavy metal to my ears - rather than rap, couldn't help tuning into it like that.

The verses have got such a powerful drive that never falters, especially the fire in the last five lines.

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank you so much.. Glad that you liked it.. :)

[Clare]

This song reminded me of a twenty one pilots song! It is so good! I imagined a person rapping this with their heart in the lyrics.! Amazing!

[Aswin R Prasad]

You made my day! :D Thank you so much ! Glad that you liked it! :)

[matpat]

you probably did it a little better than I did, I once kicked a hole in the wall when I got pissed off

[Aswin R Prasad]

Haha! :) glad you liked it! Thank you! ;)

[Sami Khalil]

Sounded like a wonderful song. You rhyme good, sir...:).......................

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank you so much..

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. .....:))))

[Greg Agee]

There ya go, thats the kind of work. I know you can do. That's good stuff. I'm glad you're doing whatever your doing bro. Significant improvement over the last. Great job !!

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thanks so much for your time and review..
It really encourages me to write more ! :)

[Greg Agee]

I hope you do write more. You know you have talent. Push the envelope even more. Take your fans to places you can only imagine.....

[Aswin R Prasad]

I'll try my best and leave the rest! :) Thanks Again :)

[Invisible Ink]

I think you are off to a really good start with your writing. Here are some suggestions to strengthen your work:
1. See what you can come up with without rhyming, then it creates a little surprise. Then when you do rhyme, it also creates a surprise...
2. Look for your most powerful or interesting lines, expound on them...

My mind was being crushed from inside, (what does this feel like? physically, emotionally?)

3. Nice image, add more, let us see you, use some adjectives...

I came back home,
turned the music ON and high,
sat there on my bed,

Turned the volume so high,
that i can't even listen my mind try, (Nice!)

Good luck with your writing!

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank you for your review.. And i'll keep what you said in mind.. :)
Really appreciate it! :)