My Rhymes

I guess all the writers can relate to this one.. :)

When i sit back and write my rhymes,

In a dark room with all my thoughts,

I see you and all the times,

that we've been through...

No! I won't forget,

you left a scar,

right through my heart!

People if you don't get me,

Just let me,

Be what i have to be,

It's something you can never be..

They say i'm short-tempered,

But i say i wanna be remembered,

To leave a mark,

No! I'm not self-centered!

Think what you have to,

I'll still be with my rhymes in a dark room!
And when time comes,

I'll do what i have to,

I don't need no one to talk to...

Now,What you've done,times two,

Still i forgive,

We all have to live..

I'll live with my rhymes,

And you can live with what you've done!
Please do regret,

'Cuz i wanna see you like that...

Be afraid like a rat,

All around are traps..

Know that you suck,

You'll survive with a bit of luck!

I won't go easy on you,

I'm not like those few,

who ain't true,

to what they do...

I'll give it all,Be ready to fall,

With my words,with my rhymes,

I'm gonna take you down!

Author's Note

We all want to have success in our life..But not everyone can get it in the first try..
We are living in a world where you'll be mocked even for trying..And success is not for the ones who don't... The path to success might not be easy..But triers are the winners!
Thank you for your time..Please do review so that i can improve.. :)

Reviews

[Zequis]

I was told once that I would be a success if I'm pleased with what I do. Somehow that's never enough for me - I really want others to like what I do ... at least some of it ...
This is another great write. Your soul shines through your words. I don't see them as "self-centered" - - I see them more bold. Courageous. Nicely done.

[Aswin R Prasad]

And your review seems very frank and true .. i'll try writing more poems like these..
Glad you liked it..

But success is happiness..And if i get to do what i like..It's 'success' for me! :)

[idiotproof--1]

good poem. at one point you say "and when time comes" I think you mean "and when the time comes" otherwise this was a good read keep up the good work

[gunjan]

you have so much unbearable noise inside you....but no doubt you write really soooooooooo gooooooood......
keep it up...

[Emily]

I loved it!
Very creative poem!
Well done!!

[Aswin R Prasad]

Really appreciate it.. Thanks! :)

[several thousand]

Great write here! The rhyming structure flows well and I love the confident ending. Stay inspired!!

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank you.. glad you liked it! :)

[ExquisiteEyes]

Wow! This is really nice. And I can relate to it. I think we all have something that we want to overcome by writing and expressing our feelings. If someone observes carefully, a particular theme of a writer can be seen, an underlying emotion.

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thanks for your review.. Really appreciate it ! :)

[SnowCat]

This was a good read. If you read it right it sounds like rap. It had great passion and you could feel the emotions behind the words. Thank you keep up the good work.

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank you ..Glad that you liked it :)
And yeah..I've wrote this one as a rap :)

[SnowCat]

great job it reads well and it sounds like a rap. You can feel the words and real emotion.

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thanks again.. Really appreciate it :)

[Akki]

Nice.... keep it up.... stay connected.....

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thanks for your review :)

[Tiffany K Charles]

And I'm rooting for you take her down!!!!!!!!!!!! I'm cheer-leading for you!!!!!!! And of course I want more....... Poems that is and rhymes too....

[Aswin R Prasad]

Haha.. Thank you so much :)

[zunie frost]

i love the simplicity in this poem !!! you use simple word to describe such a lovely massage !!! thanks for sending me request !!! such a fabulous piece of work

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank you so much :)

[zunie frost]

welcome !!