A Cold December Day

Records indicate dear poet
on a cold December day
you wandered out
blowing on your hands
for warmth and comfort
wondering where no other
soul is to be held which
way does a frozen river bend?
Which way leads to the end?
My sheet here indicates
you've searched all your life
and it comes back to a cold
December day with iced tears
and wasted blood through veins,
mourning and slipping as you
struggle along, look at you still
trying! Your turning blue,
yet you fathom the warmest
you ever felt, the dedication
is remarkable.
Look with those hazel eyes
dear man, at the storms within
your heart, I promise soon they'll
come to a dead stop.
You only carry one key, apparently
it fits no lock,
were you searching for that chamber?
One last shallow breath dear poet,
take comfort and meet death.
You lay there still, and I must wonder
of the hidden words you have died
to say,
yes indeed,
its a cold december day.

Reviews

[m.s.early]

the narrator interviews the character contemptuously as if mocking a mute. how cold is the narrators heart. how cold is the frozen river. and yet how warm the dying man's wasted blood. i wonder if the steam of his last shallow breath was even seen.

this was absolutely brilliant in the way it illustrated the scene and exposed the nature of the narrator's personality. bravo. worthy of a standing ovation.

[Shaun Payton]

Im honored by such a review Xavier. It was a cold december day for me.

[Frieda P]

Icy December, that's exactly what it feels like some days when you're trying to write something that's in your mind but freezes up in the pen...ice'd tears, great imagery there Shaun. Muchly enjoyed!

[Shaun Payton]

I am pleased:) Thank you kindly Frieda:)

[Frieda P]

Pleasure was all mine Shaun :-)

[Shaun Payton]

:) Good haha

[Stella Armour]

deliciously dark images of a deathly white December day... loved it Shaun...

[Shaun Payton]

Indeedy..Thank you quite much Stella :)

[Sabina Sindhu]

Records indicate dear poet
on a cold December day
you wandered out
blowing on your hands ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍..........nice poem

[Shaun Payton]

Thanks you:)

[Brittany Zedalis]

Aaaand another very well done poem. I loved it.

[Shaun Payton]

Thank you Brittany!:)

[Sami Khalil]

One of your best poems...In my library...
The system deleted my other review...I will try to post later...:).................

[Shaun Payton]

The system been acting up lately. Thanks Sami:)

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. So true...You are welcome...:)...............

[Joyce S. Greene]

A tragic ending "on a cold December day." This is a very moving poem, Shaun, and my heart was touched. Very well written.

[Shaun Payton]

I was close to giving up. I imagined what death would say to me. Instead of visiting death, I wrote it out.

[Joyce S. Greene]

I'm so glad you were able to find release in your art, Shaun. You write very well and that alone should give you the hope and drive to live and write on.

[Shaun Payton]

Poetry is my release, in elegance and darkness. Thank you Joyce:)

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

I felt the chills of that day, great piece, Shaun.

[Shaun Payton]

Thank you Poetic! :)