Lake Mind Quieted

Unrequited love

What trembles in thy hand?

What tears in thine eyes?

Waterfalls springing new

Ideas and wonders grand

Youthful whims of summers ago

The older folks thought us crazy

Free and unalarmed by the changing winds

Sprung briskly arrows from a bow

What leaps from a heart of faith?

What steals joys from the soul?

Count them all on two hands

We'll do somersaults in any case

What is buried in a grave?

A body of work, once living artistry in motion

How to be moved by theme of ocean

Those waves of heart beats 

I'll never waiver.

Love unreciprocated, held in hands alone

It is not nothing less, but something more as diamonds dust scratch the bone

What trembles in thy hand?

A mere pen, more immortal than me

How I write fondly of thee

And quiver where I stand

What tears in thine eyes?

A love I've known, in which none compare.

What of sorrow in losses?

Skipping rocks of memories

Across the lake mind quieted

But surely, we are rivers of every sense

And if lucky, or destined, we shall follow tomorrow.

What of dreams we do not recall?

They were dreamed in some status

Of will or imagination, 

To where no stars fall

And we walk hand in hand

As from bow, arrows of eternal love

Flew over the lake mind quieted.

Reviews

[David Scott]

Now the poet confesses his love! Passion gliding like a shadowed wing mirrored on the glassy waters of humanities wet embrace. Now the poet inspires the pen to dip and send its ripples into the infinity of entropy...
The thinking mind has let the heart speak!
Wonderful!

[Shaun Payton]

What a great review, yes a confession of love. Thanks very much David!:)

[Joyce S. Greene]

Excellent poetry, Shaun. I give you high marks for your very graceful style.

[Shaun Payton]

Why thank you very much Joyce!:)

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Another magnificent write, full with so much burning passion and love. Spectacular! You possess a very unique voice.

[Shaun Payton]

Gleb, that just made me want to continue writing. Thank you so so very much

[Gleb Zavlanov]

It was my pleasure.

[Shaun Payton]

:) Im glad

[Sami Khalil]

"What trembles in thy hand?

What tears in thine eyes?

Waterfalls springing new

Ideas and wonders grand"

[Jack...]

Beautifully penned...love is so very evident in your wonderful words today. The title drew me in, the poem made me a fan.

[Shaun Payton]

Thank you sir! :) I appreciate your reading very much:)

[Muse]

What a surreal and beautiful poem. I agree with David, your inspiration is so heart-felt that it felt "not of this world" a heavenly read indeed!

[Shaun Payton]

Thank you so very much Muse:)

[SyberRose]

A stunning and moving write...and I love the way you articulate your language of deep feelings
with the slight touch of Old English poetry...it adds that extra flavor of romance...Enjoyed Shaun....Rose

[Shaun Payton]

Thanks Rose:) I like old english. Romance use to be my only poetry id write.

[Rita L. Sev]

A beautiful declaration of love from one who dreams of it... This has the feel of a classic poem. Nicely done, Shaun!

[Shaun Payton]

:) Thanks there Rita!!

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

What trembles in thy hand?
A mere pen, more immortal than me
How I write fondly of thee
And quiver where I stand
What tears in thine eyes?
A love I've known, in which none compare.-- This is my favorite stanza...steeped in emotional depth.

This piece has a very classical feel, and I enjoyed that. The use of "thine" and "thy" sets a certain tone that we don't normally see these days, but it works well with the idea of unrequited love. I also enjoyed the imagery here. Nicely done.

[Shaun Payton]

I thank you very much Girl Friday! I was hoping it work well so im pleased.

[Rogue]

This is beautiful, Shaun.
Everything about it. It just touches the heart in a quiet and graceful way.

An excellent piece. :)

[Shaun Payton]

Thanks you so very kindly Rogue :)