The lies of boys.

every word you speak is true
what they do to us
they haven't got a clue
in their minds its all fun and games
when they take our hearts
and set them off in flames
maybe someday we'll find one
that is not full of lies
one who will be there
to wipe the tears from our eyes

what if that day never comes?
and they leave us dying broken hearted in the sun?
what if all those things told us weren't true.
and only said them to see what we would do?
In the end i wish it so,
that every spoken word was true.
that comes along a noble boy,
to wipe the tears that we cry.
and not to use us like a toy?

so hopefully one day will do.
that we will be happy, and not so blue.

Reviews

[Wicahpi]

I hope someday you will find what you are looking for.
Still so young, so don't count on it, yet!

"so hopefully one day will do. (this sentence needs reworked)
that we will be happy, and not so blue."

My main suggestion is to pay careful attention to repetition of words; which does get boring after awhile when reading. There are some good word counters out there that tell you how many times you use one word.


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[kruser23]

thanks for the friend add.....i liked the idea of this, it raises a lot of questions i think a lot of people ask .

[Last Lying Look]

This was a great poem. Some girls find it difficult to wait for the right person & just give themselves away & get hurt over & over again. Some girls just feel so strongly for someone that they don't care about being used.
Most boys actually aren't capable of that type of commitment until a certain age somewhere in their twenties.
I really loved this piece because it expresses a wish that a lot of people are longing for.
You wrote this wonderfully & I really appreciate that you took the time to right & post this.

-Elissa :)

[Wildecat]

In every Cloud there is always a Silver Lining- YOU will find that special person. A great poem. Just wanted to say thanks for your kind review of Alli Gator your comments and friendship mean a lot to me.