Hanging

Feeling lost sometimes.

I'm hanging over the ledge

Someone has pushed me over the rail's edge

I have no idea if I'm getting out of this one

Everything has already been done

These rails are so slippery, wet

 I begin to fret

I could lose my grip at any given time

Calm. Down. Just smell the fresh pine

Its there

 For you and the world to share

Ugh.

I've lost one hand and I cannot pull it back

For my body is too weak. F**k. I'm such a freak.

I call out

I shout and shout

Silence

Complete silence.

'Help'

A short little whisper making its way through the air

Hmmm. Seems as if nobody cares

So I do what any other human would do...

                     I

                             Let

                                       Go....

Reviews

[Nessie_AJ]

Loved this piece! The voice is so clear it's as though I can actually hear it, and the pain of this piece is so palpable. Nice work!

[ashleymarie]

Thank you very much!

[Nessie_AJ]

No problem!

[closed]

surreal

enjoyed the dramatic structure and format
which is very much free verse

good write


-Dream

[Jamie]

Brilliant write screams volumes :)

[Chadvonswan]

Rather unsettling and hopeless tones evoked, I felt the desperation lurk before my very eyes. Very human though, giving up, or in this case letting go, going against our natural ability to survive and endure because we are hopeless. Humans are pathetic sometimes. You never hear about dogs commiting suicide. Haha. Nice poem though (:

[ashleymarie]

Hahah.
Thank you.

[Chadvonswan]

Sure sure thing Miss Virginia

[ashleymarie]

Lol...why?

[ConfuzzledKidd]

Nicely written. I love the ending ! The whole poem is very relatable. Well done!

[ashleymarie]

Thanks for the review!

[ashleymarie]

Thanks a lot!

[Lizardo]

"I have no idea if I'm getting out of this one
Everything has already been done"
Wow, just wow.
What an awesome exposition of your feelings put in one powerful poem.

[ashleymarie]

Thank you very much!

[nazia]

The dilemma of to keep hanging of to let go is beautifully expressed. its always difficult to let go but to hold on is also a brave thing to do especially when you have nothing to go on.. great work

[ashleymarie]

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

[ashleymarie]

It all depends on how you see things.
It could be simple...
Or it could really mean something.
You decide.