Miserable Me

Setback.

This is not my life,

Not how I supposed it would be.

 

I seek happiness on a bottle of Vodka

I wobble and stumble along the roadside

I dodge my pain from the people around,

And struggle to arrest this bloody heart of mine

This is not my life,

Not how I supposed it would be.

 

I swam too far in water and something is pulling me down

I can only see those wild flowers on hills far behind

I am tired of pretending as if nothing has happened to me

My corroded pride now cannot hold me upright

This is not my life,

Not how I supposed it would be.

 

I count my breath alone in the dark

My feet are cold and my body curls for the warmth

This is not my life,

Not how I supposed it would be.

Author's Note

My new song without the tune..

Reviews

[Diane ♥ Kay]

i agree, this would make for an eloquent song. however woeful..

[A.Lee]

"I count my breath alone in the dark
My feet are cold and my body curls for the warmth
This is not my life,
Not how I supposed it would be."

I love that last stanza. Great job. You conveyed the emotion very well. I'd love to hear how it sounds with music.

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem. Easy to find the bad road. Hard to get off. I like the words and the emotion of this poem. A outstanding poem. Would be a good song.
Coyote

[BLACKCRUSH]

I was thinking this sounded like a song. This is a cool piece , some of my best work is when I do have a set back and write about it. Blessing and a curse.

Great write

Bl@ckcrushes all-

[Moonflower]

This was intense with a sense of hopelessness...relateable for me in this time of my life. Thank you for sharing, I would like to hear this as music.

[Emily Quinn]

so much incredible emotion in this, it will make a fine and memorable song indeed. Life is often dissappointing but its how we handle that dissappointment and move on/learn from it that really sums up our lives. You can learn a lot about a person not by what they have become in life but how they respond to what they have become

[dovetailer]

The cliche "when life gives lemons, make lemonade" rings so true...I thing it's rare that life ends up turning out the way we planned...

I think yours is a universal mantra...

"This is not my life,
Not how I supposed it would be."

Suck it up and make it what it can be...

[sanziwan]

love it dude!!!

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a sad song but one that I think in everyone can relate too at one point or another. The flow is smooth and you have done a great job expressing the disappointment that is so profound in this piece.

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before I came to your authors notes thought that this would be a great song...still a great song :)