The Beginning

I clutch onto what

I cannot relinquish

I'm merely pretending that I'm 

adorned with things I can't hide.

The glint in your

soft, chilling blue

eyes sends shivers

down my spine.

Your dazzling beauty

is almost madding, so I

look away, and hope you don't catch me,

desperately staring.

I feel a sensuous impulse

when I'm found in your

presence, but also

misery and sorrow.

Knowing, that I can

never be yours. I feel

broken, I weep, these feelings

blossoming and scattering.

The pain, feels

like pleasure, so at 

this rate I can't

possibly let this end, can I?

However many times

I feel I'm about to drop dead 

or fall into ruin, there is no end.

Only the beginning.

Reviews

[Choice For No Choice]

Your writing style is great, I like the way the poem ended, leaving room for more but leaving you satisfied with what's there. Punctuation could be improved, with a few commas unneeded and a period or two that could be replaced with a comma. Though maybe that isn't the case, overall this poem is a great read, so keep going!

[Patrick Jinks]

Very visual. It's refreshing to see a poem without forced, cheesy rhyming patterns for once, which in my opinion works much much better.