I look at the Mirror

I see her...

I look at the mirror and there I see

a very young woman smiling back at me.

With dark brown eyes, mysterious and deep,

she hides her monsters with secrets to keep.

I look at the mirror and there I see

the flaws on her face in morbid scrutiny.

She believes her lie--she's nothing but a beast,

with her heart intact to stay human at least.

I look at the mirror and there I see

someone with a name but without identity.

She used to be sure, now she's lost in her way

with nowhere to go, not even a place to stay.

I look at the mirror and there I see

the greatest of failures in world history.

With sins and mistakes all piled up so high

will one fervent prayer grant her mercy to die?

I look at the mirror and there I see

a shattered soul in poignant poetry.

Adorned with applause, hailed as divine

I pity the girl in her miserable shrine.

Author's Note

Photo credit: Google images.

Reviews

[Amantle Moeng]

Very well written Blue, if you say the person in here is you it scares me a bit. You used rhyme beatifully and the recurring lines just keep reminding the reader to reflect while enjoying the poetic words. Beautiful!

[Blue]

Thank you, Amantle.

[Nusquam Esse]

I like the structure you used here, the way that you do the first half of each stanza really stands out; but not as much as your final two lines! In my opinion, they are the strongest words, and the best rhyme of the lot.

[Blue]

Thank you so much, Nusquam!

[Kate H]

I'm sure this may hit close to home for a lot of troubled young girls and women alike. Unique

[Blue]

Thank you, Kate.

[Rob Ert]

I like style. It looks and sounds like a poem. There is this kind of consistence. I don't like the message but I enjoy reading beautifully written works.

[Blue]

I don't like the message, too. Still scares me. But thank you, Rob.

[Al R. Arce]

Very good piece! I enjoyed thoroughly!

[Blue]

Thank you, Cemi.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Amazing! Beautiful! Fantastic!
Great read!
:)

[Blue]

Thank you.

[Kaitlyn Raiford]

This piece is absolutely stunning and beautiful. I love how well and smoothly it flows when it is read. The picture suits the poem as well. Nice job all around.

[Blue]

Thank you, Kaitlyn.

[Kaitlyn Raiford]

You're welcome.

[costa siwale]

This is a fantastic piece! Wow!

[Blue]

Thank you, Costa.

[Mike Emil]

mirrors
images
it's all a fake
when saki fire is in your heart
they will all run
HAI!!!

[Blue]

Nice one, Mike. Thank you.

[Rocans]

There's a nice cadence about this poem I like, accentuated by your recurrent lines. I hope the persona portrayed throughout the poem is not you, because some very damning things were said. I enjoyed this one a lot though.

[Blue]

Sometimes I feel I"m the girl. Haha. Thank you, Rocans.