CEBU (Updated 1 p.m.) -- Typhoon Yolanda (international codename: Haiyan), considered as the strongest tropical cyclone in the world this year, has made its fifth landfall over Concepcion, Iloilo at noon Friday, the Philippine Atmospheric, Geophysical and Astronomical Services Administration (Pagasa) reported.
WOW! Powerful strong images can be seen while reading this. I loved it, and I felt a tug of sorrow and pain for the people who are drowned in these storms, as no one is available to help them till after the storm.
I like the last two lines:
"Hell seems warm and heaven, bright
The less air I breathe, the lovelier the sight..."
But I feel as though the comma should be after bright, as it creates a unnatural pause right there.
Overall this was a wonderful poem, even though it's tone was sad.
I hope that anyone who is in the path of Haiyan is safe, and doesn't suffer the same fate.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Katie, no words can fully express how tragic that experience was. Thank you for your kind review and.. read moreKatie, no words can fully express how tragic that experience was. Thank you for your kind review and for expressing your concerns. :)
Great to hear you and your family are all right. :)
Blue, you really should be submitting this one to publishers, new outlets, magazines, any kind of medium. This one is absolutely fantastic. It does exactly what you wanted it too; it gives a reader the sense of being powerless and at the mercy of whatever nature arbitrarily chooses. The sense of family, and that at least being with them in what could be the end is a blessing is a heartfelt sentiment.
Great work, Blue, although, I wish the muse for it wasn't so close to your home.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Matt... I'm honored that you find this piece publishable. :) Anyway, there's another typhoon coming... read moreMatt... I'm honored that you find this piece publishable. :) Anyway, there's another typhoon coming. Zoraida. Same places will be affected. Ugh. When will this end? I hate living in this constant fear. I've been traumatized enough.
I love the imagery and word choice! It flows well and is absolutely beautiful. I cannot imagine being in the place of the narrator. Nothing can change the mindset as strong as the acceptance of death can.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Kaitlyn, thank you. Believe me, nobody wants to be in the shoes of the speaker. :) Best wishes!
Yes, yes, yes. I couldn't agree more. Thank you so much, John! :)
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Who could have thought the disaster would be so awful. I heard on the BBC news today 10,000people ma.. read moreWho could have thought the disaster would be so awful. I heard on the BBC news today 10,000people may have died! Such an awful thing and many more starving And homeless and vulnerable. Our thoughts are with them.
11 Years Ago
There must be a purpose for this tragedy. Still, we are not giving up. :)
WOW! Powerful strong images can be seen while reading this. I loved it, and I felt a tug of sorrow and pain for the people who are drowned in these storms, as no one is available to help them till after the storm.
I like the last two lines:
"Hell seems warm and heaven, bright
The less air I breathe, the lovelier the sight..."
But I feel as though the comma should be after bright, as it creates a unnatural pause right there.
Overall this was a wonderful poem, even though it's tone was sad.
I hope that anyone who is in the path of Haiyan is safe, and doesn't suffer the same fate.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Katie, no words can fully express how tragic that experience was. Thank you for your kind review and.. read moreKatie, no words can fully express how tragic that experience was. Thank you for your kind review and for expressing your concerns. :)