Drowning

Foreseeing the worst...

The sight around me is awful to behold

Worse than any tragedies and stories ever told

In a minute or so, I'll join the chorus of cries

Breath of life to piteous creatures denies

Such sweet death to spend with my family

As we hang on to the mercies of a mango tree

Praying to deities to spare us please

From cold waters creeping up our knees

Shouts of help and screams in the air

Unanswered sighs melting to despair

Deaf heavens and unconcerned lords

Unimpressed by hearts' tears and words

Water reaches necks and acceptance sinks in

Where our disbelief and denial have once been

Unfortunate fates--oh tragic! So tragic!

Like Noah's flood and the sinking of Titanic

If hope and rainbows are still not found

No dry land or habitable ground

Hell seems warm and heaven, bright

The less air I breathe, the lovelier the sight...

Author's Note

Friday, November 8, 2013

CEBU (Updated 1 p.m.) -- Typhoon Yolanda (international codename: Haiyan), considered as the strongest tropical cyclone in the world this year, has made its fifth landfall over Concepcion, Iloilo at noon Friday, the Philippine Atmospheric, Geophysical and Astronomical Services Administration (Pagasa) reported.

-from http://www.sunstar.com.ph/breaking-news/2013/11/08/typhoon-yolanda-makes-5th-landfall-iloilo-312742

Photo credits: Google Images

-Thanks for those who have expressed their concerns. God bless us all! :)
-My heart weeps for the 10,000 lives lost during the tragedy.

Reviews

[Catherine Frain]

WOW! Powerful strong images can be seen while reading this. I loved it, and I felt a tug of sorrow and pain for the people who are drowned in these storms, as no one is available to help them till after the storm.

I like the last two lines:

"Hell seems warm and heaven, bright
The less air I breathe, the lovelier the sight..."

But I feel as though the comma should be after bright, as it creates a unnatural pause right there.

Overall this was a wonderful poem, even though it's tone was sad.

I hope that anyone who is in the path of Haiyan is safe, and doesn't suffer the same fate.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Katie, no words can fully express how tragic that experience was. Thank you for your kind review and for expressing your concerns. :)

[Vani Jalagar]

This awesome indeed........enjoyed reading:)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you, Vani. :)

[Avinash]

Our prayers with you for your loved ones.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Avinash, thank you for your prayers. :)

[annabellee]

Fantastic poem. I can't even imagine how it must be but your words bring me a little bit closer.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks, Annabellee. I would never wish anybody to experience what we had.

[annabellee]

you're most welcome, hope you're ok :)

[unsavable_soul]

Holy hell,
This is powerful and my heart drops in it's narration. Such a powerful piece and such a tragic truth. Little I can say other than My thoughts are with those suffering and may this writing ease your heart a bit.
Chris

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Chris, thank you so much for your wonderful comment. And I appreciate your concerns for all of the victims. :)

[Dayran]

A terrible tragedy ... hope you and your family are all right.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

We are. Thank God for that. And thank you for your prayers. :)

[Solilokiss]

You described it all so well. Made me cry. Your last line was perfectly described and placed sunlight into a place so dark with sadness. I often feel that we shouldn't cry as much for those who have lost their lives, they are in Paradise with The Lord. It is those who are left behind that hurt the most and she'd the most tears of pain. What devastation the world faces at the moment. Couldn't have happened to nicer, warmer, kinder, sweeter people. My prayers are with you all.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Your words have touched my heart...My, oh, my. Thank you for your thoughts and prayers and help. I can't thank you enough. :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

very tragic event, and what a kind heart you have to write about what these people must have been feeling and tap into there emotions.
Very deep inspiring message and meaning, and great poem, i enjoyed the read :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you, Cimmy! Anyway, I might be quite late in reviewing your works, okay? I can hardly find extra time outside school and work. Best wishes for you. :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Your most welcome anytime :)
Its ok hun i understand your a busy woman :P
Good luck with school and work :)
You to :)

[nibhz]

A very powerful and moving creation! can immediately feel the pain, the fear, the anxiety!!!! the strong choice of words, nice rhyming!! good work! keep it up!! :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Nibhz, thank you. Thank you. :)

[joshua deathdealer]

This is incredibly powerful and extremely well written. Tragic tragic poem. God bless.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Joshua, thank you. :)

[smurfett]

This is very powerful poet. At first I felt the fear, but toward the end, I felt as comfortable as the person slowly drifting into the unknown. Perfectly written and graphic....thank you

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

You felt what I want the readers to feel, thank you so much. :)