Drowning

Foreseeing the worst...

The sight around me is awful to behold

Worse than any tragedies and stories ever told

In a minute or so, I'll join the chorus of cries

Breath of life to piteous creatures denies

Such sweet death to spend with my family

As we hang on to the mercies of a mango tree

Praying to deities to spare us please

From cold waters creeping up our knees

Shouts of help and screams in the air

Unanswered sighs melting to despair

Deaf heavens and unconcerned lords

Unimpressed by hearts' tears and words

Water reaches necks and acceptance sinks in

Where our disbelief and denial have once been

Unfortunate fates--oh tragic! So tragic!

Like Noah's flood and the sinking of Titanic

If hope and rainbows are still not found

No dry land or habitable ground

Hell seems warm and heaven, bright

The less air I breathe, the lovelier the sight...

Author's Note

Friday, November 8, 2013

CEBU (Updated 1 p.m.) -- Typhoon Yolanda (international codename: Haiyan), considered as the strongest tropical cyclone in the world this year, has made its fifth landfall over Concepcion, Iloilo at noon Friday, the Philippine Atmospheric, Geophysical and Astronomical Services Administration (Pagasa) reported.

-from http://www.sunstar.com.ph/breaking-news/2013/11/08/typhoon-yolanda-makes-5th-landfall-iloilo-312742

Photo credits: Google Images

-Thanks for those who have expressed their concerns. God bless us all! :)
-My heart weeps for the 10,000 lives lost during the tragedy.

Reviews

[Catherine Frain]

WOW! Powerful strong images can be seen while reading this. I loved it, and I felt a tug of sorrow and pain for the people who are drowned in these storms, as no one is available to help them till after the storm.

I like the last two lines:

"Hell seems warm and heaven, bright
The less air I breathe, the lovelier the sight..."

But I feel as though the comma should be after bright, as it creates a unnatural pause right there.

Overall this was a wonderful poem, even though it's tone was sad.

I hope that anyone who is in the path of Haiyan is safe, and doesn't suffer the same fate.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Katie, no words can fully express how tragic that experience was. Thank you for your kind review and for expressing your concerns. :)

[Calibaster]

Wow! this was amazing, and sooo true! I feel awful, but at the same time relieved that I wasn't caught in the middle of it. You have a way with words. :) ;) keep up the good work.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you, Alverrann. Your words lifted up my spirit. :)

[Calibaster]

You're welcome! ;)

[Maskedthoughts]

This poem does what every great poem should do it makes you feel, you don't read but you experience. Great job this was fantastic!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Wow, that's one of the highest praise I have received. Thank you so much. :)

[Horizon K.]

This is heart wrenching... I have no words, just to share my sad sad heart, for those who have suffered. I hope you and yours are in a safe place.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Your sad heart and prayers are more than enough. Thank you so much! :)

[Trace]

Mother Nature can be a cruel parent at times. Nice poem for this tragic event. Trace

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Yes, I agree. Thank you, Trace. :)

[Leslie Philibert]

Fine poem, and my best wishes to all the people of the Phillipines that they get the help they deserve..

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I thank you in behalf of my fellowmen. :)

[KAin]

This is beautiful and powerful work, Blue... I'm just so sorry it happened.
It's a joy to read... but the pain behind it... I can scarcely imagine it.

You're in my thoughts, friend. Stay safe.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Landred, I appreciate your concern very much! Thank you. :)

[MandaBear]

Wow what a powerful poem! Crazy what mother nature is doing now a days! Rather scary really. But great poem anyway! I hope everyone gets help after such a storm

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you, Manda. Things are getting better here now. :)

[FlatLineBeauty]

This was very touching, Blue. I enjoyed it. Blessed be in love and light. xo Winter

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks, Winter. :)

[Joyce S. Greene]

I pray that you and your family have survived that horrendous storm and now have slelter and food, Blue. God bless you!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I thank those people who made all the help possible. And thank you for your prayers, Joyce. :)

[Joyce S. Greene]

Are you OK, Blue?

[Quoting Ravens]

Super strong here. Stay safe and dry!!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Dry, haha. Yes. Thanks a lot, Ravens. :)