Drowning

Foreseeing the worst...

The sight around me is awful to behold

Worse than any tragedies and stories ever told

In a minute or so, I'll join the chorus of cries

Breath of life to piteous creatures denies

Such sweet death to spend with my family

As we hang on to the mercies of a mango tree

Praying to deities to spare us please

From cold waters creeping up our knees

Shouts of help and screams in the air

Unanswered sighs melting to despair

Deaf heavens and unconcerned lords

Unimpressed by hearts' tears and words

Water reaches necks and acceptance sinks in

Where our disbelief and denial have once been

Unfortunate fates--oh tragic! So tragic!

Like Noah's flood and the sinking of Titanic

If hope and rainbows are still not found

No dry land or habitable ground

Hell seems warm and heaven, bright

The less air I breathe, the lovelier the sight...

Author's Note

Friday, November 8, 2013

CEBU (Updated 1 p.m.) -- Typhoon Yolanda (international codename: Haiyan), considered as the strongest tropical cyclone in the world this year, has made its fifth landfall over Concepcion, Iloilo at noon Friday, the Philippine Atmospheric, Geophysical and Astronomical Services Administration (Pagasa) reported.

-from http://www.sunstar.com.ph/breaking-news/2013/11/08/typhoon-yolanda-makes-5th-landfall-iloilo-312742

Photo credits: Google Images

-Thanks for those who have expressed their concerns. God bless us all! :)
-My heart weeps for the 10,000 lives lost during the tragedy.

Reviews

[Catherine Frain]

WOW! Powerful strong images can be seen while reading this. I loved it, and I felt a tug of sorrow and pain for the people who are drowned in these storms, as no one is available to help them till after the storm.

I like the last two lines:

"Hell seems warm and heaven, bright
The less air I breathe, the lovelier the sight..."

But I feel as though the comma should be after bright, as it creates a unnatural pause right there.

Overall this was a wonderful poem, even though it's tone was sad.

I hope that anyone who is in the path of Haiyan is safe, and doesn't suffer the same fate.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Katie, no words can fully express how tragic that experience was. Thank you for your kind review and for expressing your concerns. :)

[EmaleighLynn]

This makes me tear up. I'm so glad you're safe, and I'm praying for you all. Thank you for offering us this insight into the event.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you so much, Ema. :)

[MsJewel]

A heartfelt poem for those who didn't survive this tragedy. Thankfully you are safe.

:) Julie

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you, Julie. :)

[Daisy Morgy]

I absolutely loved this imagery and powerfull message behind the words!! its such a dedication to the people who loose their lifes, you should be proud :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you so much! :)

[ayosonolowo]

A powerful poem indeed, i really like it.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks a lot! :)

[Inda]

Well penned, it really hits home and it is evident that you care about this very much. Great job!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I care about this very much because I am one of the victims. Anyway, thank you so much, Inda! :)

[Steph Bates]

A great balance of emotion and voice. You give the reader an insight to the fear and realization that may be felt by those who are in these situations. Altegether I'd say you did a great job.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you, Steph. :)

[Talkless]

Woow!!this is emotionally intence,i fill the plight of the phillinians.wonderfull poem

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I thank you in behalf of all the Filipinos. :)

[Mark]

I fear this is not the last of these 'super storms'. A good poem. :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

We live in the same fear. Thanks for the compliment, Mark. :)

[Latifa]

so much emotions I drifted with this poem great job

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you, Latifa. :)