I Plead My Case

A sinner's plea...

 

 

At the cross I plead my case

To You who willingly took my place

Heaven bids me now confess

The beast in me I now profess

And here I kneel before the throne

with sins I've done, secrets now known

all laid out for the Judge to see

Your verdict now awaiting me.

 

At the cross I plead my case

Fearing for my Master's face

I grieve for all the chances lost

Ignorance of a pleasure's cost

Excuses, reasons now prove so lame

Earthly glories fading to shame

Truth withheld and white lies told

Loving the bliss of Satan's hold.

 

At the cross I plead my case

Begging for a drop of grace

Sinful life I have renounced

Your endless love to be announced

Proclaim me guilty for justice's sake

Torment of hell I now shall take

But like to the thief before he died

Remember me where you reside.

 

Author's Note

I have shown my sentimental, sensual, and suicidal side. Here's a glimpse on the spiritual. :)

Anyway, I have nearly 350 RRs so I have to finish those before accepting RRs again. To be fair, I won't send my RRs in the meantime. This poem will be the last for now.

School break is over so I might not be as active in this site as before. Best wishes to all!! :)

Reviews

[Reeti]

The structure and style of narration along with the strong choice of words set a perfectly penitential mood in the poem. The rhyming has impacted it with subtlety. It has created a sort of mysticism to reflect the great divide between a living being and the deity. Though it has not clarified what particular sins have been committed, the verse provokes the readers with the foreboding knowing that The Judgment will take place. It is very natural, and this writing has an artistic alluring to express that acceptance of it. If only the brooder found out what difficulties await him in time!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Reeti, thank you so much for your detailed and constructive review. One of the best reviews for this piece. :)

[Reeti]

It's my pleasure! =)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A very spiritually driven piece. The idea of the cross is meaningful to many religious people and yet it is a red rag to others.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Exactly, John. Thank you for your kind review. :)

[Joyce S. Greene]

You have a special poetic talent, Blue, that shines regardless of the theme you choose. This is a very reverent poem, and you have once again proven that you can write very well.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Joyce, thank you very much for your kind words! :)

[Chandradhish Ghosh]

Catharsis of sorts...but very good indeed Blue...you have a gift...utilize it...and inculcate it...I am really glad to have read this piece!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Ghosh, wow. Your reviews are really sincere and kind. I can't thank you enough. :)

[MandaBear]

Amazing poem! I really felt the emotions in this.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you, Manda! :)

[Solilokiss]

Stunning. I felt as though I sat beside you, my obtrusive ears open to your tender prayers. A lovely write full of honesty and humility. If only we all sat there, pleading his forgiveness. His most beautiful trait is how he always feels you never require his forgiveness. He loves you always. He understands always. He is open to you always. Keep your heart ever blooming.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you for your heartwarming review. :)

[smurfett]

This is absolutely beautiful. We all should take advice from such powerful words. I, among all of us am also guilty of sins pleasures. Thank God for Jesus, our Lord and Savior who bridged the gap for us. Thank you...I love this!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you for letting me know that this piece has touched your soul. :)

[kublakhan27]

It's funny how some of the most spiritual people spend a lot of their lives sinning. I think I qualify for this group. Judgement Day shouldn't really be something to fear, yet I fear it. I've never been able to articulate that emotion, which makes this piece so amazing to me, not just from the thematic standpoint but from a purely literal standpoint. This is an absolute awe-inspiring piece...I can feel the power of these words in my bones. This is not likely to be the only time I read this. Wonderful work my friend :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you so much! And I feel the same way about the judgment day, actually...

[Douglas White]

Excellent poem. Good flow, and good story. Well done.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Your review is comparatively shorter compared to the others, Doug. Haha. I'm glad you think this as excellent. :)

[annabellee]

This is a a really great poem. Loved the repetition :)
Well done :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Annabellee, I love anaphoras. :) Thank you. :)

[annabellee]

you are most welcome :)