Does she?

10/25/13

 

 

 

I heard you're dating someone

a girl just caught your eye

Tell me about this new love

the cause of your "Goodbye".

 

Does she greet you good morning

with breakfast in your bed?

Does she know your fav'rite songs

and sing them in her head?

 

Does she kiss you 'til you're breathless

and treat you like a prince?

Does she keep all your love letters,

not throwing them in bins?

 

Does she sing in the shower

and waltz on the floor?

Does she fix your black necktie

and wave bye from the door?

 

Does she pack up your lunch

a sandwich with a note?

Does she send you thoughtful texts

an "I love you" and a quote?

 

Does she understand your hobbies

the cigars and the games?

Does she also love your friends

the quirks behind the names?

 

Does she miss you when you're gone

and wait 'til you're back?

Does she offer better things

all the things that I lack?

 

Does she love you like I did

or does she love you even more?

And baby, does she even know

she has all I'm wishing for?

 

 

Author's Note

I missed rhymes. :)

Reviews

[L.Edward]

Its the little things isn't it. Really that's what you miss most about someone. The things no one else can do. The feelings that no one lese can make you feel. Deeply heartwarming and life affirming. Is this about a real person? If it is, he would be crazy not to be with you!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Haha, thanks for the empathy, Edward. It was really his loss, not mine. Ha! ;)

[Ruth]

Lovely work....sad but lovely...nice final imagery too hon, a belter of a line, emotionally wrenching xx

[Blue]

Thank you!

[Leslie Philibert]

this an angry, well written poem, full of emotion, like it !

[Blue]

Thank you!

[burnhouse]

I feel like it would make a nice song. :3

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Hmm, do you have a melody in mind? :)

[Derek Smith]

blue poem, to the blue we all feel from time to time how it also seems to reach back around and catch us again, well written, good rhythm it was very nicely written. again I enjoyed it keep it up

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Derek. I'm glad you know how I feel. :)

[Tiffany Boles]

I enjoyed this. It is well written, and full of great rhythm, well done.

[Blue]

Thank you!

[Rocans]

I liked the way it flows when I read this in my head, good melody and rhymes while still capturing the essence of your hurt. I like this.

[Blue]

Thank you!

[Rita L. Sev]

And great rhymes you have here, Blue - a broken hearted poem, well crafted!

[Blue]

Thank you!

[K. Hicks]

awww this is such a good piece! I really enjoyed it

[Blue]

Thank you!

[Mae Taylor]

This is a wonderful piece. the simpleness of the truthful hurt of a situation like this is very touching. you did a great job of relating all the overlooked aspects of love.

[Blue]

Thank you!