And that was how...

10/23/13

 

 

Oh, child...

Has anybody told you a tale of a love once true?

 

 

 

 

Well, it all began one summer

in a coffee shop next town.

It was Friday. It was sunset.

She was writing. He was smiling...

And that was how I met your father.

 

 

Every Friday sunset, we went to the cafe.

In between cappucinos and chocolate cookies,

we smiled and talked

and laughed and dreamed...

And that was how I loved your father.

 

 

Then came winter Fridays

but he still had his summer smile.

I was sure he was "The One"

so I introduced him to my best friend...

And that was how I lost your father.

Author's Note

It's been more than a week since I last wrote a poem. I've been very busy in school these past few days...

This is my first draft.. I think I somehow had forgotten the art of editing... But I like it the way it is so...put up with it. Haha.

Anyway, thanks for reading! :)

Reviews

[Rita L. Sev]

Wonderful storytelling here, and a great twist at the end. Well done, Blue!

[Rose of many colours]

Amazing you caught me offguard with this ending.Wow This is one piece have me speachless..This poem has a voice.

[TL Boehm]

my goodness. Such a resonant story/poem. Totally unexpected ending to this. Well done.

[Pryde Foltz]

An enchanting write that turned to the tragic. Lost child and lost love, too much to bear, I would imagine.

[Anand Sehgal]

this was a marvelous piece. top class narratives went on to describe complex emotions. good job :)

[Jack...]

Now this completely caught me off guard...nice with the surprise ending my friend. I know this is sad in nature but I loved it.

[Ruth]

Amazing piece and wonderful heartfelt twist...had me rooted to the spot x

[Diana]

I'm left wondering whose child? A comedic mix-up in the tragi-comedy of life...

[Tom]

A lack of confidence did the damage here !

A poignant tale of a love lost, penned in pleasing poetic fashion!