And that was how...

10/23/13

 

 

Oh, child...

Has anybody told you a tale of a love once true?

 

 

 

 

Well, it all began one summer

in a coffee shop next town.

It was Friday. It was sunset.

She was writing. He was smiling...

And that was how I met your father.

 

 

Every Friday sunset, we went to the cafe.

In between cappucinos and chocolate cookies,

we smiled and talked

and laughed and dreamed...

And that was how I loved your father.

 

 

Then came winter Fridays

but he still had his summer smile.

I was sure he was "The One"

so I introduced him to my best friend...

And that was how I lost your father.

Author's Note

It's been more than a week since I last wrote a poem. I've been very busy in school these past few days...

This is my first draft.. I think I somehow had forgotten the art of editing... But I like it the way it is so...put up with it. Haha.

Anyway, thanks for reading! :)

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

Crushing finale. It's impossible not to be moved by this piece and the moment it relays. The summer smile, which seemed so precious to one person, turns out to be precious to someone else. The fact that it's a best friend makes it all the more heart-wrenching. Powerful piece :)

[Latifa]

i enjoyed the opening very much

[Rocans]

Enjoyed this thoroughly. It was simple yet effective in portraying a kind of suggested sadness. I think this was a great write.

[poetdoug]

You may now join the famous ranks of the classic writer "O Henry" and his famous Surprise Endings.
Great story prose my friend

[Angel]

I like it just the way it is...
Very nice...

[nibhz]

a lv stry with a twist! unexpected yet a beautiful turn to the poem, loved it! good job!

[Baban.A.A]

well done. it is very sad, but yet bitter truth, what I mean this story becomes something very common among us humans, humanity now has everything bar trust. thank you

[Mark]

Surprise ending! I liked it.

[Leslie Philibert]

nice work, filled with details, a poem with a narrative thread !

[ayosonolowo]

a splendid read and write, weldone.