And that was how...

10/23/13

 

 

Oh, child...

Has anybody told you a tale of a love once true?

 

 

 

 

Well, it all began one summer

in a coffee shop next town.

It was Friday. It was sunset.

She was writing. He was smiling...

And that was how I met your father.

 

 

Every Friday sunset, we went to the cafe.

In between cappucinos and chocolate cookies,

we smiled and talked

and laughed and dreamed...

And that was how I loved your father.

 

 

Then came winter Fridays

but he still had his summer smile.

I was sure he was "The One"

so I introduced him to my best friend...

And that was how I lost your father.

Author's Note

It's been more than a week since I last wrote a poem. I've been very busy in school these past few days...

This is my first draft.. I think I somehow had forgotten the art of editing... But I like it the way it is so...put up with it. Haha.

Anyway, thanks for reading! :)

Reviews

[Solilokiss]

This was wonderful. Picturesque melancholy. Beautifully scribed!

[Calibaster]

OHMYGOSH!!! This is sooooo sad! Why do you write so many sad things?! Not that I can complain, they're good too. ;) Nice job, as usual.

[Sue]

A bittersweet poem which you are very good at Blue - well done! :)

[Christopher Angel]

Oh man. The first two parts made me smile till the last and you took my smile away and made me sad. Well done!

[gombeggar]

nice twist of a story...leads one 2 wonder about the details...why would an ex-girlfriend wonder to a child that was not her's?

[Chandradhish Ghosh]

Is the child being spoken to your child or your friend's child? Ah...you ended too abruptly...which brings questions to the readers mind...which in effect does make your poem attractive...but I wished you wrote a little more...nevertheless...I like!

[Tiffany Boles]

Well written, much enjoyed.

[Baby Ricochet]

Ah tis better to love than never to have loved at all.

[MsJewel]

I really like the simplicity of this poem - you take the reader through so much and the ending was quite powerful.

:) Julie