Never a Fairytale

He had the eloquence of a poet,

the valor of a knight,

the wisdom of a sage,

and the fortune of a king.

His seeming perfection was a tell-tale,

but I was too crazed to care.

Hi speeches were clever cliches,

his embrace, an enchanted prison,

his love was a lie of lust,

and his kiss, an unforgivable offense.

For when I was still his,

he was never really mine at all.

I was nothing but a fleeting interest;

a remedy for his boredom.

The story has turned sickening sweet,

and passion revealed itself to be a pretense.

He walked away,

head held high in apparent victory,

for he had crushed another dreamer's heart.

And off he went for another thrill,

in search of another damsel.

He left me in my  own tower of torment,

writing this pathetic poem,

about him who loved and left.

Our story was my scar,

a typical tale of unhappy ending,

penned in the advent of a heartache,

in the twilight of my dreams.

He was never a prince...

Just another frog in disguise.

And ours was never a fairytale...

Author's Note

Thanks for reading! :)

Reviews

[Pryde Foltz]

A beaut of a write, Blue. Prince Charmings are rare.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Have you found yours, Pryde? :)

[Pryde Foltz]

Maybe...................

[MsJewel]

I love how you compared this romance to a fairytale - that never really was - Very creative and beautifully written. I enjoyed this very much Blue.

:) Julie

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

The comparison is pretty much overused, I think. I've been reading same theme over and over again. I just wrote my version and I'm glad you liked it, Julie! :)

[Eddie Davis]

Wow, another wonderful poem. Masterfully done, it makes it really hard to review, because I can't find anything to criticize. You summarize the rise and fall of the 'Prince' so clearly and elegantly it is nearly magical when you read it. I think of these as your 'epitaphs of broken hearts' for you nearly feel as if there was a memorial garden for lost loves, filled with monuments for each one, your poems would be found upon them. You really need to get these published, Blue!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I hope a literary agent might chance upon my writings, Eddie...And get them published. :) There are lots of talented and awesome writers here in WC so maybe agents are having a hard time choosing.. Haha. Anyway, you should read the works of other writers, too, Eddie. You'll find them more talented than I am, believe me. :)

Thank you so much for this. :)

[Dr. Wood ?]

the more I read of you the more I want to..this is stunning Blue...I was hooked as soon as I read the marvelous line...'his speeches were clever cliches' I love clever word play

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Dr. Wood.. you always leave me hanging with your unfinished sentences, and this is not the first time. Haha. Anyway, thank you so much. I find it hard to believe that someone like you could like my works. I adore your writings, Doc. :)

[Dr. Wood ?]

You have talent girl...So what is not to like?

[Michael G. Smith]

This is so sad. I am seeing more poems on this subject be it not as well peened as this flawless piece ( I don't praise lightly). Unfortunately, in this generation we lost the true gentleman, looking for true love eventually leading to marriage in the end.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

This theme is overused, Mike. Yet I was somehow hoping my version would stand out from others. I'm glad you noticed. ;) Thank you so much! I'm glad Milagros found a gentleman like you.

[Michael G. Smith]

I believe I am more the blessed one. She tempered a wild spirit and showed me what real love is. Before we got married she wouldn't let me kiss her, hold her hand or put my arm around her. It wasn't long before I understood how special she was and refrained from these things for us to begin a solid Christian foundation for our marriage. A true miracle(Milagros).

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

That's so sweet, Mike. You are an exemplary couple. And nothing beats a marriage that is rooted in Christ. :)

[MikeV]

Great write, i felt your emotions throughout
very well written. Great piece :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks as always, Mike. You are always so kind. ;)

[Tiffany Boles]

What a truth to all them words. Nice write.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Yes, thank you, Tiffany! :)

[Sheila Kline]

I like the way you likened the relationship to a fairy tale - very clever, especially the lines about the story being your scar - penned in the advent of a heartache!
This is certainly a new twist on a love that never really could be love for the other partner was too self absorbed, and deceitful to be a fairy tale prince!
Excellent poem!!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you so much, Shiela! I'm glad you liked it. ;)