Never a Fairytale

He had the eloquence of a poet,

the valor of a knight,

the wisdom of a sage,

and the fortune of a king.

His seeming perfection was a tell-tale,

but I was too crazed to care.

Hi speeches were clever cliches,

his embrace, an enchanted prison,

his love was a lie of lust,

and his kiss, an unforgivable offense.

For when I was still his,

he was never really mine at all.

I was nothing but a fleeting interest;

a remedy for his boredom.

The story has turned sickening sweet,

and passion revealed itself to be a pretense.

He walked away,

head held high in apparent victory,

for he had crushed another dreamer's heart.

And off he went for another thrill,

in search of another damsel.

He left me in my  own tower of torment,

writing this pathetic poem,

about him who loved and left.

Our story was my scar,

a typical tale of unhappy ending,

penned in the advent of a heartache,

in the twilight of my dreams.

He was never a prince...

Just another frog in disguise.

And ours was never a fairytale...

Author's Note

Thanks for reading! :)

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

He was never a prince...
Just another frog in disguise.
And ours was never a fairy tale...

I believe the last three (3) line some up the basis of this read...to the audience...as with those that have everything "presumed"...in the the first stanza:

He had the eloquence of a poet,
the valor of a knight,
the wisdom of a sage,
and the fortune of a king.
His seeming perfection was a tell-tale,
but I was too crazed to care.

Do not view the mirror...for they are vanity...so others are just disposable pieces in a game of chess...nothing will satisfy them...not even one like themselves...that has the same equality...for when they ultimately meet their own challenge...does their heart break...no...because the darkness consumes more their passion to disregard the facts for their interests in life...the commodities...trophies on a shelf of the relationship game...only to find out the Queen is the hardest piece to fall...for in the game the King will fall without her protection...

Thanks for the invite --- Blue...I am busy with promotion and details for my up & coming book: The Onyx - Vena Amoris...coming out soon...please spread the word in the Philippines...I will be returning there in December and campaign my book...God bless...

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you for sharing your lovely insights, Glen. I have learned so much from you. Best wishes on your writing career! :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

You're welcome...I got in depth here a bit...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"just another frog in disguise"

a fractured fairy tale here...but so well manufactured...

the feelings pour out of your lines.

jacob

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Jacob, thank you. :)

[Mark Heathcote]

I like it when I read a poem and feel I can hear the author clearly throughout; it’s no mean feat to manage that, good job.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Oh, Mark. Thank you. :)

[Mittens]

Aw, sorry, Blue, this sounds like it got written after a pretty rough day. Um... is it too late to apologize on behalf of those of us with a Y chromosome?

In terms of technicalities, one thing I wanted to let you know is that your editing is becoming nearly perfect, even in rough drafts. You know those little tiny things I would annoyingly find and point out? There aren't any anymore. You're doing a great job with language, and in this particular case, you even keep all of the fairytale metaphors in harmony which gives this a crisp, clean read. Keep up the good work. :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Matt, thank you. This is one of my favorite works and I am proud of this. I'm thrilled you like it since I value your opinions very much. :)

Anyway, I find it endearing to hear (or read?haha) an apology in behalf of others. Thank you, Matt. :)

[joshua deathdealer]

I really like how you infused your poem with fantasy. Great imagery and portrayal.

[Tom]

A bittersweet tale, the lady's heart was stolen but she moved on....eventually !

Top write !

[SyberRose]

Beautifully penned dear...enjoyed very much...Rose:)

[smurfett]

Wow poet...this is very beautiful. So much pain and the feeling of betrayal. Kind of sad when what we think is a fairy tale life is no more than a passing as you said remedy for boredom...Love this work. Thank you

[Mike Emil]

been called a frog before
didn't care
i'm up in my villa tower anyway
and the grass keeps growing
HAI!!!

[Calibaster]

I really like this, you portrayed betrayal very well, I have a poem that it similar! The Golden Rose. I think this is better though, because it's only too true. It happens far more often then it should. I wish people would show how they really are all of the time, then there could be no deceit, if you know what I mean. :) ;) keep up the good work!