To William

A message to a lover.

Please tell him I will miss him

When fate bids us apart

For though we love each other

Ours is a hopeless art.

The time with him I spent

Is best of all the  best

A "then" worth looking back

As bird longs for its nest.

This poem will cause him heartache

But dread not the goodbyes

I'm sure we're soulmates somewhere

Where our forever lies...

Author's Note

I challenged myself to write a poem in less than 10 minutes. This is what I've come up with.

P.S. William, I hope you get the chance to read this. :)

Reviews

[Eddie Davis]

For 10 minutes of work, you certainly did a good job. A sad, sad poem, but well done.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks, Eddie! :x

[Mark]

We have many soulmates I think. People we journey through past, present, and future with. At least, I'm hoping there's more than one. LOL

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Haha, true? Well, good luck on that! :x

[rutherford]

Well done description of a love breaking apart

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks, Rutherford! :x

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I liked this aspect of this write...the pace and timing like the relationship in the lines gives you as a reader just enough...without going into details...thanks for the invite...

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks, Glen! And congratulations for being published! :x

[Sabrina Jade Howard]

Ten minutes!!!!!! This is great! I love the message! NICE WORK!!!!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks, Sabrina! Glad you liked! :x

[Rob Ert]

I hope William is not dead.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Lol, Rob Ert, he isn't.. Thanks for dropping by! :x

[Rob Ert]

Then god give you the best of union : )...Stick together no matter haha

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Haha, I'm moving on. Thanks, Rob! :x

[wordwarrior]

Oh and you did wonderfully. This felt like a song within me as I read it. I sighed and smiled(even with the sadness)Flow, rhyme, imagery...just beautiful!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks, Wordwarrior. :x

[MsJewel]

A beautiful poem and written in less than ten minutes! wow! I love the last few lines, I'm sure we're soulmates somewhere where our forever lies... Simply beautiful!
:) Julie

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks, Julie! I'm glad someone like you commented on this one. :x

[Mittens]

I like that fact that you're giving yourself challenges; that's going to lead to some adventurous results. It's going to be eager to see how things turn out with some of your other experiments.

You put together a great piece here. It was surprising to see that it even follows a rhyme scheme despite the time restriction. I wonder what will happen when William sees it...

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

My mind is always filled with rhymes. My free verse poems take forever to be born. They're undergoing major revisions these days. Thanks, Matt. I'm excited to try sensual poetry. I think it's really hard, though. Thank you so much for the reviews! :x

[Pryde Foltz]

Wow, you should write under the gun more often. Great story to this one.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Lol, thanks, Pryde! :x