To William

To William

A Poem by Azure Montessa (Blue)
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A message to a lover.

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Please tell him I will miss him
When fate bids us apart
For though we love each other
Ours is a hopeless art.

The time with him I spent
Is best of all the  best
A "then" worth looking back
As bird longs for its nest.
This poem will cause him heartache
But dread not the goodbyes
I'm sure we're soulmates somewhere
Where our forever lies...

© 2013 Azure Montessa (Blue)


Author's Note

Azure Montessa (Blue)
I challenged myself to write a poem in less than 10 minutes. This is what I've come up with.

P.S. William, I hope you get the chance to read this. :)

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Posted 10 Years Ago


Where forever lies/You have done well.This is a poem that oozes emotion into us as you tell of your lament for yourself and another.It is empathy, one of gods true gifts to humanity I loved this piece the meter the rhyme the tempo the beat the intertwining pain of two loves letting go Well done well done

Posted 11 Years Ago


Azure Montessa (Blue)

11 Years Ago

Tate, this is such a beautiful review, thank you so much! :)
Tate Morgan

11 Years Ago

you are welcome well deserved
eloquent, bittersweet and wonderful. It would make a beautiful sad song

Posted 11 Years Ago


Azure Montessa (Blue)

11 Years Ago

Haven't thought of that. ;) Thank you so much! :)
Blue, I chose to read this because as you may have guessed my name is William, I am quite fond of the old fashioned rhyme, you did a good job in just ten minutes. I do hope he reads this, it sounds like a love lost, parting is always such sweet sorrow.
Will


Posted 11 Years Ago


Azure Montessa (Blue)

11 Years Ago

If you have read my old poems, you'd notice that I used to be a rhymer, too. I tried free verse just.. read more
Will Neill

11 Years Ago

Good looking guy then (ha ha) Take Care.
Will
Ahh this made me sigh, even though it's sad. But the ending has that hopeful tone. Even though sometimes two don't belong together, there's always hope to meet in other circumstances.
Lovely AND in 10 minutes! Wow~!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Azure Montessa (Blue)

11 Years Ago

I'm hoping for a second chance. Thanks, Wordwarrior! :)
Beauty and heartache and penned in under 10 you say
(does Yoda voice) - "Talented poet you are ....yeeesssssss. Flowing with the Force you are!"
X

Posted 11 Years Ago


Azure Montessa (Blue)

11 Years Ago

This had me chuckling! Hahaha. Thank you so much, Anto. :)
You should challenge yourself further, you made your challenge look easy. Excellent piece!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Azure Montessa (Blue)

11 Years Ago

Haha, glad you think so. Thank you so much!! :)
In ten minutes? My goodness, you are a fortunate one! The words come to you easily. Sometimes love is not enough....the theme of a poem I just posted coincidentally! :) I liked this. Lydi**

Posted 11 Years Ago


Azure Montessa (Blue)

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Lydia. You are always so generous with compliments. :)
Great ending line! When I read this I tried to put myself in the pictures situation, I try to feel what she could be feeling, think what she could be thinking. Very well written!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Azure Montessa (Blue)

11 Years Ago

I always love endings. Thank you so much M. J. Glad you liked it. :x
"I'm sure we're soulmates somewhere
Where our forever lies..."
These line really took mine heart away!! It touches you deep down!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Azure Montessa (Blue)

11 Years Ago

I love that part, too. Thanks, Vidushi! :x

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