Stranger, Would You Mind?

A message of a spellbound girl to a stranger.

Stranger, would you mind?

If I take the honored seat
     Next to your glorious throne?
Would you grant me the privilege
     Of breathing divine air as yours?

Stranger, would you mind?

If I dip my fervent fingertips
     Into your sea of golden locks?
Would you allow a mere mortal
     To caress your face carved like a cherubim?

Stranger, would you mind?

If I dare steal a kiss
     Just to taste heaven from your lips?
Would you accept my willing soul
     And take me now as your own?

Stranger, would you mind?

If you command your celestial crowd
     To suspend forever in this moment?
Would you trade your divinity
      And stay in this city bus with me?

Author's Note

Just another attempt in free verse. This poem was inspired when I was in a bus, sitting next to a gorgeous guy. :x

Reviews

[Vidushi Sharma]

"If you command your celestial crowd
To suspend forever in this moment?
Would you trade your divinity
And stay in this city bus with me?"
best lines according to me..!! nice piece!!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Ohh, I always love end lines, too. Thanks, Vidushi! :x

[Sami Khalil]

"Stranger, would you mind?

If I dare steal a kiss
Just to taste heaven from your lips?
Would you accept my willing soul
And take me now as your own?

Stranger, would you mind?"
A very interesting write...Thank you for sharing...:)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks a lot, Sami! :x

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Chris]

a strong sense of love at first sight...

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I agree, Chris! I wish I had known him, though. :x

[Michael G. Smith]

The is a subject I cannot comment on, but would you seriously let a stranger do these things to you?

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Hmm, good question... :x

[Michael G. Smith]

Sometimes a fantasy should stay just that, right?

[Keith]

Ou have just put into words the thoughts of every public transport traveller at one time or another. Lovely poem.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Hahaha. Did I? I wish someone was thinking of something like this when seated next to me. LOL. Thanks, Keith. Also your friend request is greatly-appreciated! :x

[Keith]

Oh at some time someone somewhere will indeed. But you will never know.

[OTownPete]

Wow, what a build up to a surprise ending. Your friend in words, Pete

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks so much for your reviews, Pete. Well-appreciated! :x

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

This makes me smile...brings me back to my high school days when I usually make everything to sit beside my crush. LOL.

Nice attempt. When I'm the one beside that gorgeous guy, I would do the same thing.
Well-penned, Blue. Keep it up!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Really? So did you succeed in sitting next to him? I wouldn't do anything so obvious like that, though. The nearness of my crush was enough to make the universe conspire to humiliate me. ;)

I was just glad the guy in the bus wasn't able to read what I was writing. Otherwise... LOL

Anyway, thank you, Dhaye. It's so nice of you to review on this. :x

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Haha! My teenage years is really exciting and funny. And I will always treasure those blissful days especially with my friends. By the way, I remember that just sitting beside someone I admire made my scores in the tests higher (because I'm inspired). LOL.

You're welcome.

[Donald]

That is the best way to write. Most of the poems are inspired by someone or something in your life at the right moment of time. Beautiful

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks again, Donald. :x

[Dye]

Blue- you do so good with free verse. I like this so much...all of your references are great. You, just the mere mortal, and him.. divine air...heavenly lips...oooh la la!! Sounds dreamy :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you so much, Dye. Compared to rhymed poems, I do lots of revisions on free verse. :x

[Mark Heathcote]

I catch busses all the time and there are times seats are very short in number and people cover the seat next to them with a bag or even sit on the aisle seat to prevent others sitting next to them.
So, this feeling of unease I thought was very well expressed and I enjoyed your poem. Well done!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I will never feel uneasy when the guy sitting next to me is handsome. ;) Thanks a lot, Mark. :x