Stranger, Would You Mind?

A message of a spellbound girl to a stranger.

Stranger, would you mind?

If I take the honored seat
     Next to your glorious throne?
Would you grant me the privilege
     Of breathing divine air as yours?

Stranger, would you mind?

If I dip my fervent fingertips
     Into your sea of golden locks?
Would you allow a mere mortal
     To caress your face carved like a cherubim?

Stranger, would you mind?

If I dare steal a kiss
     Just to taste heaven from your lips?
Would you accept my willing soul
     And take me now as your own?

Stranger, would you mind?

If you command your celestial crowd
     To suspend forever in this moment?
Would you trade your divinity
      And stay in this city bus with me?

Author's Note

Just another attempt in free verse. This poem was inspired when I was in a bus, sitting next to a gorgeous guy. :x

Reviews

[BlueZan]

I like this. Every once in a while you come across a person that makes you feel compelled to ask these exact questions, to try to learn something about yourself from a stranger that you have fallen in love with for what may only be a brief period time but is still just as powerful. Very well expressed!!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Yes, BlueZan. I hope you come across a person like this, too. :x

[Mittens]

This is definitely a curious glance into the female psyche; never in a million years would I guess that people are composing poetry while sitting on the bus. It's also kind of humbling to see that what goes through a woman's head is far more articulate than what goes through ours. We're.... um... less subtle. Another intriguing work from you. Thanks for the read request. :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Haha. I'm intrigued when you said men are "less subtle".. I really hope you can give me hints on what goes on inside the male brain in times like this. ;) Thanks for taking time in reviewing my work. :x

[shallimarRose]

I liked the title right away. If you are a natural rhymer free-verse is a bit more difficult. I am still a work in progress where free-verse is concerned.. thank you for the rr. Nice story line in this.. Rose

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks, Rose! Also, best of luck on your free-verse! :x

[MikeV]

I loved it! Your authors note also put a smile on my face :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Haha, glad I made you smile! Thanks, Mike! :x

[Pryde Foltz]

This was awesome. I think we have all fallen in love with someone who shares our morning commute or goes to the same coffee shop as you. How these people can capture our imagination. This write gives live to this dynamic splendidly.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Yes, I hope these kind of people stay in our lives forever, though. Thanks, Pryde!

[Heather]

a glorious write!! :D and tad creepy and weird if it was to really happen though, great write!! :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I'd be awestruck if he suddenly flew off with silver wings! Thanks, Heather! :x

[Heather]

it would be cool but also a bit scary!! you are very welcome!! :D

[Jack...]

The driver can open the doors as much as he likes, I am not getting off of this bus. What a cool ride you have taken us on Blue.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I wish that bus ride lasted forever! Thanks, Jack! :x

[Revolutionary]

it is not everyday you meet a godess on the bus you have to do all you can in that situation to compel her to stay

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Yes, thanks, Revolutionary! :x

[Simon Welsh]

Oh, oh, I like this! Wanton desires indeed.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

There you go, Elliot! Thanks to you! :x

[SyberRose]

A very unique poem...brought a smile to my face...nicely done Blue...Rose

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Glad I drew a smile on your face. Thanks, Rose! :x