The Girl in Black

The girl, who once had been faithfully white, now accepts her new identity in color black.

Amidst the party lights

And women scant'ly clad

I catch the worst of sights

A girl in  black  goes bad.

I know her very well

Her name is Mary Claire

She's never been to hell

I wonder why she's there.

Her wings and  halo gone

Her innocence long dead

Just judgment has been done

For lust and sins unsaid.

T'was I who stole her all

Her life, so pure and chaste

As I devour her soul

I sigh upon such waste.

The girl I once had loved

Now angel's tainted black

Thrown from heaven above

She's never coming back.

Author's Note

These days, I had been trying to write free verse. However, I constantly find myself drifting back to rhymes. This time, I tried ABAB rhyme scheme (contrary to my usual AABB). Your comments would help me a lot. Thank you. :X

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. A twisted tale with a realistic ending. Hard to come back to norm after tasting the darkness. No weakness in the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Yes, thank you so much for the review. ;)

[ANTO]

Blue - this reminded me so much of the song 'Angel is a Centrefold'. Both are tales of someone we maybe put on a pedestal, proving to be human. I like the verse style and the rhyming style - it makes for a very easy read but without diluting the content. Rhyming doesn't have to be about the flippant and this proves that. Well done.
X

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I've never heard of that song before but I'll certainly check it out. Thank you so much for appreciating this. Not many people get to like rhymed poems. :)

[Hester Vane]

This is excellent! I love the style and the language, I just love everything about it! Would you mind if I posted this or a link to this on my blog? I like to try and get as much exposure as I can for my work and other peoples! If not its ok, but I would love to share this!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Wow, I'm flattered! I would be very much willing and happy, Hester, and thank you for the offer. (I like the courtesy in your asking of permission.) Would you mind if you send me the link of your blog as well? I'd like to see how it would turn out. ;)

[Anand Sehgal]

I know her very well
Her name is Mary Claire
She's never been to hell
I wonder why she's there.

I see a touch of sympathy, a touch of introspection. Good write :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you so much. :)

[Itiswah Ditiz]

I like how you wrote this. I found it to be powerful. Well done. :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

What a coincidence. We have almost the same avatar!!!. :) Anyway, thank you so much. :x

[Itiswah Ditiz]

lol ya :) You are welcome.