Moth and Fire

A poem about the moth who fell in love with the fire.

Like a moth to the fire

I'm drawn to you

Captivated

Spellbound

By the passionate heat

The warmth

Of sweet temptation

Luring me

To come closer

To take a taste

To feel the fire

Of love and lust

And life and death

And my feeble silvery wings

Dance around you

Around and around

In sweet surrender

And worship

And desire

To dip my tongue

To your delicious flames

And feel your lethal kiss

Like a moth to the fire

I'm drawn to you

Like a moth to the fire

I love you

To my death.

Author's Note

This is my first time to write a free verse. (My comfort zone used to be a poem with rhymes.) I really have no idea if this one is good enough. Your comments would help me a lot. Thanks in advance. :)

Reviews

[ms. barrie]

i'm no expertise when it comes to critiquing poetry but i personally love this poem, the imagery/metaphors of scorching passion, always leaving one to want more, no matter what cost... is amazing. i
also thoroughly enjoyed the fluidity of this write...
brilliant poem, thanks for sharing :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you so much, Barrie. :)

[ms. barrie]

You're very welcome, bluedudi :)))

[Mittens]

I wouldn't be so much concerned with free verse being "good enough"; it's not so much about structure and order so much as it is about impact, and you do a fantastic job about that.

If you imagine crossing a road where all the cars moved in a singular line on rhythmic beats it makes it very easily navigable, if technically harder to write because there's more structure.

On a free verse street, all the cars run at their own speed and you don't find out how fast they are until they're right in front of you; it's much harder to navigate but so much more exciting, especially if there's a good ending to it. And that's what you capture very well; an exciting journey, toying with the concept of love and danger, and a fitting ending.

Very good work. :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you so much, Matt. That's such a nice logic that you have there. :)

[Lydia Shutter]

Great metaphor in this sweet love poem. The imagery is exceptional. Emotions well expressed. Lydi**

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you so much, Lydia. :)

[Dorian Gray]

This is fantastic. I love your approach and the method used to convey your message. Truly a great writer.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you so much, Dorian. :)