Moth and Fire

A poem about the moth who fell in love with the fire.

Like a moth to the fire

I'm drawn to you

Captivated

Spellbound

By the passionate heat

The warmth

Of sweet temptation

Luring me

To come closer

To take a taste

To feel the fire

Of love and lust

And life and death

And my feeble silvery wings

Dance around you

Around and around

In sweet surrender

And worship

And desire

To dip my tongue

To your delicious flames

And feel your lethal kiss

Like a moth to the fire

I'm drawn to you

Like a moth to the fire

I love you

To my death.

Author's Note

This is my first time to write a free verse. (My comfort zone used to be a poem with rhymes.) I really have no idea if this one is good enough. Your comments would help me a lot. Thanks in advance. :)

Reviews

[Dr. Wood ?]

Glad I read this..You seem to take well to free verse....Keep it up, why don't you...I always have trouble with it myself...I have a rhyming mind.....OLD FASHIONED some might say....You did an excellent job here

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Hey, I have a rhyming mind, too! :) That's why I tried to write a free verse for a change. Why don't you try it, too? Let's see how it turns out. But I'm sure it's going to be excellent. ;)

[Michael G. Smith]

You definitely have a way of words about you. Your themes so far are a little difficult to read. I have a strong testimony of marriage after living a sinful life for many years in my past. I found it to be hollow always needing more to satisfy. One day I decided to pray for Him to show who I should be with and after a week of this I heard a voice tell me I would meet a woman of non-American heritage. The next day I walked into a dance and saw this Dominican women, she said hi and the voice inside my head said "that's your wife". Long story short her name is Miracles(Milagros) and we were married four months later sixteen years ago.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Wow. That is...Destiny! I hope finding one's soulmate is as easy as hearing that voice. Thank you for sharing this to me. This inspires me a lot. ;)

[Michael G. Smith]

Sounds easy because I didn't go into detail in how I had to convince her we were predestined to be together. I was still working my way back to a good man, she said no matter how much she didn't know if she could trust me in her prayers she kept hearing it's the right thing.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Amazing.. Your love story is one of a kind. You're still happily married until now, I presume?

[Michael G. Smith]

More everyday. I truly thought fairy tales were just that until I met Christ and my wife.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

You are a living testimony of a happy marriage. I really pray to have one some day. ;)

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

That was very well done... The trick to free verse (which I prefer) is drawing honesty from your pen. You accomplished that here, well done!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you so much. :x

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

You are most welcome.

[Frieda P]

I'd have never known this was your first time, you're a natural, and I really like how you spun this one....nice finish. Kudos.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks a lot, Frieda. I appreciate your review very much! :x

[Frieda P]

Was my pleasure Blue, muchly enjoyed!

[Rita L. Sev]

A vivid piece of free verse, with a clear message about being cautious in love... Well done, Blue.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Let's not play with fire. Haha. Thank you so much, Rita. :)

[Joyce S. Greene]

This is a splended poem, Blue. Anyone would think you were a free verse pro after reading your verses. Very well done!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Haha. Thank you so much, Joyce. Your compliments mean so much to me! :x

[rutherford]

Blue -- you have a genuine voice in free verse. I think poems with short lines are the most effective. The last stanza is your gem and sets off well from the rest. Well done.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks a lot, Rutherford. I appreciate this so much. :-)

[James Foley]

I was prepared to write a polite complimentary review, whatever I thought. But in all sincerity, this brilliant song just knocked me out. The breathless speed of the lines and emotions and imagery make rhymes unnecessary; and in fact rhymes would slow this great poem down. What is amazing is that this is not only sublime art but also believable truth. I don't sense anything at all false here. You're terrific. - See more at: http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/arzeljoy_blu/1234998/#sthash.KclgQmND.dpuf

[James Foley]

I was prepared to write a polite complimentary review, whatever I thought. But in all sincerity, this brilliant song just knocked me out. The breathless speed of the lines and emotions and imagery make rhymes unnecessary; and in fact rhymes would slow this great poem down.
What is amazing is that this is not only sublime art but also believable truth. I don't sense anything at all false here. You're terrific.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Woooowww, James. I don't think I deserve any of your great compliments! But thanks, anyway. I appreciate your review much more than you'll ever know. :)

[Heather]

this is beautifully written and i love the fact that you were brave and stepped out of your comfort zone and suceeded!! great job!! :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Yes, thank you, Heather! Let's be daring every now and then. :)