The Guys I've Loved Before

List of names of my former flames and brief descriptions each. :)

Marjon was my first grade crush

To see him play, I'd be in rush

I liked his smile and wits between

Too bad he liked my friend Regine.

Gerald's the boy who played board games

Proud, arrogant; I called him names

Choc'lates, roses, "Will you be mine?"

I turned him down that Valentine.

Ahl was famous, he lived next door

He gave letters, laughters, and more

Handsome and smart; he was okay

Two weeks later, he showed up gay.

Kenneth's charming, first love was he

We were so sure we're meant to be

Ours was magic, thrilling, and fun

We knew too late the spark was gone.

John's my senior and brother true

He loved me, oh, he loved her, too

Our sweet affair, the saddest bye

Last time we met, he watched me cry.

Patrick's a jerk, the worst of all

Heaven of hell, song of my soul

Of love's mem'ries, his was the best

But he broke me, just like the rest.

The glorious past of former flames

Unfolded by this list of names

When love's a risk, when love's a chance

I'll take a look, I'll take a glance.

Author's Note

I don't know if the last stanza added to the effectiveness of the poem. Also, I had troubles with punctuations. Can you tell me if I used excessive and needless commas? And how do you find the poem? Thank you so much! :)

Reviews

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I love this its different and was fun to read.
It has a good story line to it and its even a little funny.
The rhymes are amazing, the meaning is great.
Its a very well written peace i enjoyed it.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you so much, Cimmy. :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

one of my favs of urs this one :)

[Tsukin Archangel]

I love this poem, though i had to lol at the Ahl bit, though that probably hurt, still found it funny idk, probably cause I'm gay too... soo ANYWAY! That aside. I really did enjoy this poem, it was cleverly written and executed and flowed nicely off the... err... mind... tongue? Since I didn't read it aloud? BUT Yeah, I think your punctuation was fine :o I didn't see any problems with it. Oh and I found this through that teen contest thing >;3 BEST OF LUCK!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Haha, you had me laughing, Tsukin! Thank you for the compliments and hey, glad you dropped by!

[Tsukin Archangel]

Lol no problemo~ I aim to please :p

[MBUYISA]

i like this poem, it made me think of .... but hei i really like the poem, it very creative and the idea behind it, never grow old

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Glad you liked this. It took me a great deal of time to sum each story in a single stanza. Thank you!! :)

[Dreamer]

I enjoyed reading this piece, nicely done. It is true, boys sure can play with our emotions and end up breaking our hearts...

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Yes, Dreamer. Thank you so much!!

[Dreamer]

you're very welcome!!

[Laminators Dubai]

its awesome!!!!!!!!!!!
best in the day!
thank you so much!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Glad you enjoyed, Glitch! Stay happy just like the cute girl in your avatar! :)

[Laminators Dubai]

well i just just like this glitch and exams up and i cant even smile....XD

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Lol. School's busier than ever here, too.. I hope you ace your exams.. ;)

[Laminators Dubai]

Sure i will
coz last time i couldnt even make it to the exam hall...coz i was sick....now im prity good..

[Mia]

Boys, boys, boys…they’re trouble I tell you, until their not! I really enjoyed your poem
Blue, very entertaining. I like the last stanza and I’m glad you included it!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I remember these lines from a poem. I think it's from "Much Ado About Nothing":

Sigh no more, ladies, sigh no more!
Men were deceivers ever,
One foot in sea, and one on shore,
To one thing constant never:
Then sigh not so, but let them go,
and be your blithe and bonny."

Glad you like this, Mia! ;)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Is something like, "on the altar of my particular beliefs no one matters more than the music of your lips."

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks a lot!!! :x

[Dhaye]

Nice reminiscence of your past, Blue. Everyone's searching for his/her soul mate. Probably, you' re not meant for each other. They say that when someone "good" was taken from you, someone "better" or maybe "best" will be coming...

'Twas a little funny and I enjoyed reading. Well-penned!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Oh, such a reassuring promise you have here, Dhaye. Thanks a lot! Have a great weekend to you! :x

[Frieda P]

You'll kiss a lot of frogs before you meet your prince Blue...like this little peak into your past history of love loss or 'former flames' as you so aptly put it, ha...always remember where you've been and where you're headed, nicely pen'd.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Hahaha, yes, Frieda. Frogs disguised! Thank you for the sound advice. Noted. :x

[Frieda P]

Hahah frogs abound...lol, you're welcome ;-) x

[Michael G. Smith]

A great testimony to past loves. I like how you took us all the way back to the beginning.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you so much, Smith. :x