A Home In Your Heart

This was a tough concept for me to write on. But here it goes..

I found a home in the city of your heart,

A garden of roses, a fountain of splendor;

I found a place in the warmth of your dreams,

An abode beyond love's tender.

A gateway to the seventh heaven,

Within my reach;

Like the enchantment of a prayer,

None can preach.

Like the strum of a string,

The poignancy of a fall;

The magic of a miracle,

An eagle's squall.

When you were lost in the labyrinth,

I built a home where you never can;

And they sang to you all along,

A woman just became a better man.

It's you, love just came your way,

Come sit here in front of me;

While you wonder who owns your heart,

Let me stare at you for eternity.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[FJ Davis]

Just came over to tell you I love your name. Now, I find out it's a pseudonym. Although--and I'm sure you've heard this before--your actual name sounds like the pseudonym.
Well, even though "Adelia Aligieri" is a phony, you did have the good taste to choose it--I guess that counts for something.
By the way, your poem is unbelievably lovely and staggeringly good--especially for a mere lass to have written.

[Muhammad]

"A gateway to the seventh heaven,
Within my reach;
Like the enchantment of a prayer,
None can preach."

I adore these lines. Keep writing.

[Deepak Belbase]

A well crafted poem, keep it up! seems to be motivated from Dante Alighieri !

[Ser Arthur Dayne]

I don't know if it was your intent or maybe I simply read too much Greek myth but, it looks to be as if this is a representation of the story of Theseus and the Minotaur from Ariadne's POV. Especially the line, "a woman just became a better man," could be seen as a reference to Ariadne's metamorphosis to godhood after Theseus betrays her. Though it could just be me.

It's a beautiful piece nonetheless. The right imagery and it flows well. Cheers.

[Michael G.]

Clear and meaningful write. Well done. Keep writing.

[Adelia Alighieri]

Thank you, sir! :)

[the_stoic]

splendid .

[The Jay]

Immaculate. Just immaculate. Anything else I'll say will just be unnecessary.

[Lexi Nicole]

Very nicely written. I love the rhyme scheme and it has a very steady flow as well as a poignant meaning. It's one of those poems that I'm sure will stay with me for the rest of the day. Good work!

-Teagan

Impressively well written. I love the theme you used. A warm place like home surrounded by such a beautiful metaphor, this is just gorgeous.