Message in a bottle

I don't know what inspired me to write this thing. But there's always a desire in everyone's heart.

I’m standing here by the shore,

My feet slightly buried in the sand,

The sun set appears dull to me,

My eyes are searching the sea,

There’s no boat I am waiting for,

Since you’re not coming back too soon,

But because you promised me,

You’ll send me a letter,

By the sea,

I am standing here waiting for it,

There! I see it,

Lurking with the waves,

It’s coming to me,

I race farthest into the sea,

And reach out to grab it,

In minutes I could take hold of it,

And read how much you love me,

There, it’s coming as fast as the water itself,

As if Poseidon is bringing it forth himself,

‘Pandora!’

I look behind to answer the call,

I look back at the ocean within seconds,

It’s gone,

No more in my sight,

I search the entire horizon with my eyes,

But in vain,

Then I feel a touch on my toes,

I look to find a bottle,

Lying next to my feet,

I smile and bend to pick it up,

I pop open the cork,

Shove my fingers in to grab the paper,

Pull it out,

Unfold it,

To find that you’re not coming back,

Not at all,

Never,

So I fold back the paper,

Exactly the way it was before,

Squeeze it back in the bottle,

Put the cork intact,

And throw it back in the water,

With all my might,

So if it reaches you,

To see the paper untouched,

You understand,

That I never got your message,

And will be waiting,

So that in your heart,

Back at the farthest corner of it,

There always remains a desire,

To come back home,

Home, to me.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Abdul Aziz]

Amazing, Arwa. What makes this poem so touching is that I'm experiencing a near identical situation in life right now. And come what may, we'll never cease to believe! The language is slightly off in comparison to your other writes, but heck, when you write as good as this, I don't care! This is going into my favorites and also on my FB wall!

[Chandler bing]

that's also one of my fav songs by 'the police'..this stuff is really cool..

[Alia ZJ.]

Clearly outstanding. A denial is what we may all want when things take a total flip-back. You did an amaing job, Arwa! :D

[Chris]

This is in a class by itself.

[Faraway Sado]

Beautifully written and extremely touching. Keep it up!

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wonderful..simply wonderful

[sentimental~ galore]

Magnificent wonderment....this almost sounds like a song, i could picture a music video the entire time i read the poem. I loved the greek mythology connection, posedion and pandora...great comparisons but i would let lose on the language. It sounded too constructed, it could use better flow but overall beautiful idea. lovely.

[Bruno]

A great story with great feelings.

[Sel Whiteley]

Powerfully written. Your persona is exceptionally-well-drawn. You vividly capture the landscape of the sea and the sense of longing.

[Khaaki]

This is so touching Arwa... It is brimmed with emotions. Hopes, desires, despair and what not! It goes straight into my favorites...

[An owl on the moon]

What a beautiful, enchanted write.. the message that has such sorrow, yet the hope and love within you to hold on... to love always.. to wait for that moment of being united forever. Felt like a dream.