I wrote this a long time ago, don't know why I didn't share it here in first place. Some of the rhyme is kinda immature but it works with the flow.
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a very uplifting pleasant read!! the rhyme is nice and consistent - the ABCB throughout - it gives it a nice subtle rhyme (I didn't think any were immature) to carry the concept!! it all works very well! great poem!
This poem is like a morning in spring. Its fresh, its young, its innocent and naive. I loved it. The words flow with a raw and impulsive flow, its sprightly elegance easily winning against the metrical irregularities. Even the sorrow expressed in the poem has the charm of youth encompassing it, rather than the cold sobriety or black anguish, and it is so refreshing to see. Keep penning. You'll go a long way.
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Oh, ALL is well with the world when ALL is well with me ~ yet living in a broken world teaches us to be more thankful for the good things in life, and to humbly accept the so-called 'bad'....both teach us the mortality and vanity of what can be seen...while what is unseen is eternal and of greater value.
An uplifting write of beautiful musings !!
This has an oddly mythical feel to it, rather like the legend of Icarus, or something like that. It begs the eternal proverbial question of good and bad, black and white, love and hate - none can exist without the other, it seems, and it is unfortunate, but then could we recognise the good things without the comparison of the bad, the rough without the smooth, or the light without the dark..? No, it seems not. And that is a sad fact of human existence. It reminds me of some maxim I read somewhere once -on the back of a coaster I think it was, strangely- which went: 'all good things end badly, otherwise they wouldn't end..' But if they didn't end then that endlessness would perhaps be as monotonous as mundanity..
A mystical, and yet sad poem, inevitably so, evoking days of searing gold blocked in by coal-black days of dull darkness.
. it feels like all good things come to an end ... because we have stopped believing in the power of life ... that which is not valued ... over a period of time ... gets devalued ... though nature is beyond that ... even on a bad day ... a flutterby (butterfly) is beautiful ... and so is poetry ... like yours ... :) ...
I think that things come to an end so that we can fully apreciate them, icecream for breakfast every day would be a pain in the long run! great write. :)