Beautiful Love

Right; so I wrote this 'song' a couple of months ago and then yesterday I kinda erased it and rewrote the piece in 7 and a half minutes (Cake break counted =P)

Beautiful,
Is the twinkle in your eyes,
When I see you smile,
At me.

Beautiful,
How you swept me off my feet,
Purely,
So easily.

And when you held out your hand for me,
I knew you knew I always knew;

It's so plain and so perfect,
Don't you think it's so wonderful,
It's a beautiful love,
And I owe it all to you.

Beautiful,
Is the feeling when I look behind,
To find you,
Standing there.

Beautiful,
When you touch my eyes,
And clear those teardrops,
Away.

And when you save me from falling apart,
I knew you knew I always knew;

I want you to know,
That it's more than just a miracle,
It's a beautiful love,
And I owe it all to you.

Beautiful,
Is the way you teach me,
Little things in life,
Eagerly.

Beautiful,
When you guide me to dance,
Under the moonlight,
In the rain.

And when you make the time slow down,
I knew you knew I always knew;

There's magic everywhere,
It sparkles when you're around,
It's a beautiful love,
And I owe it all to you.

Beautiful,
When you forget the present,
So easily,
For me.

Beautiful,
Is how I deeply care,
About this trust you have,
In me.

And the way my head fits into your neck,
I knew you knew I always knew;

It just needs some evil,
To make it a fairytale,
It's a beautiful love,
And I owe it all to you.

Author's Note

Good critique always welcomed =)

Reviews

[FlawedByDesign]

I have to agree with Selene and RhymingReactivated in their review. The poem is truly beautiful.
However, I also have to agree with the_stoic when he talks about
"I knew you knew I always knew;" - I'm not so much concerned about it being a tongue twister, but it comes across as bad English.

Besides this pet peeve, really well done:)

[SamBug]

This was so amazing. It was cute and really good. I love how you continued to repeat beautiful and then explain what you thought it was. This was good. Keep writing. You have talent for sure!!!

[the_stoic]

I knew you knew I always knew" - this was hard to fathom in the beginning ! is kinda tongue twister ..

towards the end do you mean to say that your story is better than even a fairy tale ? that's what i understood .. kindly enlighten me .

sweet love writes .. they always conjure so many memories in my mind for what once was ...

keep writing :)

[Abdul Aziz]

Beautiful,
Is your poem,
A tour de force
On beauty.

Well, need I say more? This is extremely well written, the music dancing in the readers' minds long after having finished reading it. You obviously have great talent!

There are a lot of lines in this poem that I really like!
This is going in to my favorites right now :)

[Lexi Nicole]

This is so sweet! I love it! Beautifully crafted, every little piece of it works so perfectly. And I love how you used an Aladdin picture for this. A wonderful love story to put with a wonderful poem. Great work!

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

each verse is a superb reflection of love~ and then the last verse . . . . I am smiling at the twist~ for it is a fairy tale of heart your poetic explores~ questioning ~ how can all this exquisite emotion remain so vibrant without knowing the other spectrum~ the universal laws of balance~ I don't know if that was your intent~ but for me what iIsee is the ying and yang bumping gently through reality's curtain~ well done~