Beautiful Love

Right; so I wrote this 'song' a couple of months ago and then yesterday I kinda erased it and rewrote the piece in 7 and a half minutes (Cake break counted =P)

Beautiful,
Is the twinkle in your eyes,
When I see you smile,
At me.

Beautiful,
How you swept me off my feet,
Purely,
So easily.

And when you held out your hand for me,
I knew you knew I always knew;

It's so plain and so perfect,
Don't you think it's so wonderful,
It's a beautiful love,
And I owe it all to you.

Beautiful,
Is the feeling when I look behind,
To find you,
Standing there.

Beautiful,
When you touch my eyes,
And clear those teardrops,
Away.

And when you save me from falling apart,
I knew you knew I always knew;

I want you to know,
That it's more than just a miracle,
It's a beautiful love,
And I owe it all to you.

Beautiful,
Is the way you teach me,
Little things in life,
Eagerly.

Beautiful,
When you guide me to dance,
Under the moonlight,
In the rain.

And when you make the time slow down,
I knew you knew I always knew;

There's magic everywhere,
It sparkles when you're around,
It's a beautiful love,
And I owe it all to you.

Beautiful,
When you forget the present,
So easily,
For me.

Beautiful,
Is how I deeply care,
About this trust you have,
In me.

And the way my head fits into your neck,
I knew you knew I always knew;

It just needs some evil,
To make it a fairytale,
It's a beautiful love,
And I owe it all to you.

Author's Note

Good critique always welcomed =)

Reviews

[Phibby Venable]

And the way my head fits into your neck,

very, very lovely work, it moves very gently but reveals the
strength of love so well.

[Linear]

I guess you knew, you always knew. this is a lovely song sung with love, it's just beautiful

[Disillusioned]

I love this. You have the flow, the depth, everything you need here. And it is gorgeous. Nothing to critique, well done.

[Sweets]

Beautiful use of parallelism :)
I love your style in writing poetry :)
Kinda close to mine XDD
This is seriously amazing !
Good job!

[poetic soul]

Beautiful
The way you have put this up,
the beauty of a relation,
relation called love!!!

[.]

. oh, how beautiful ... it's nice to be rescued ... and then be able to rescue right back ... :) ...

[Sarah J. Kelleher]

This is so passionate, I quite liked it :) The repetition every two or three stanzas really stands out too, I don't think I could have worded the feeling any better. Well done.

[Marianne]

Sweet, sweet love in those layered expressions of how it feels when one's world is steeped in the beauty of mutual love and trust.
I'm touched by the repetition of "And I owe it all to you."...it speaks of selfless love and humble acceptance of the one who makes your world a better place !
'Love never fails'.
It's interesting to note the stark contrast of evil able to destroy that precious relationship...once we turn away from giving freely and receiving thankfully !

[stars are far]

really beutiful
i like it:)

[JENY]

Beautiful…
Just beautiful….
Really beautiful….
The pattern of writing you chose to express beauty…
Is very striking…
Loved it…