Beautiful Love

Right; so I wrote this 'song' a couple of months ago and then yesterday I kinda erased it and rewrote the piece in 7 and a half minutes (Cake break counted =P)

Beautiful,
Is the twinkle in your eyes,
When I see you smile,
At me.

Beautiful,
How you swept me off my feet,
Purely,
So easily.

And when you held out your hand for me,
I knew you knew I always knew;

It's so plain and so perfect,
Don't you think it's so wonderful,
It's a beautiful love,
And I owe it all to you.

Beautiful,
Is the feeling when I look behind,
To find you,
Standing there.

Beautiful,
When you touch my eyes,
And clear those teardrops,
Away.

And when you save me from falling apart,
I knew you knew I always knew;

I want you to know,
That it's more than just a miracle,
It's a beautiful love,
And I owe it all to you.

Beautiful,
Is the way you teach me,
Little things in life,
Eagerly.

Beautiful,
When you guide me to dance,
Under the moonlight,
In the rain.

And when you make the time slow down,
I knew you knew I always knew;

There's magic everywhere,
It sparkles when you're around,
It's a beautiful love,
And I owe it all to you.

Beautiful,
When you forget the present,
So easily,
For me.

Beautiful,
Is how I deeply care,
About this trust you have,
In me.

And the way my head fits into your neck,
I knew you knew I always knew;

It just needs some evil,
To make it a fairytale,
It's a beautiful love,
And I owe it all to you.

Author's Note

Good critique always welcomed =)

Reviews

[Talal Tashfeen]

Perfect!

[Joanna Maharis]

This is a beautiful passionate peace.

[Searching 4 Serenity]

Beautifully written. The heart always speaks strongest when it's in love and happy. Always LOUDEST! when displeased and angry

[SpokenWord]

Beautiful love indeed spoken from a loving pen. I like the last verse as it brings balance to this beautiful love by introducing some evil that I think will make the bond stronger. I think the credit should go to both parties as it takes two to love like this. I think this poem is a true love poem as it dives into dear reasons why love can be so beautiful and so perfect. Great write

[Bruno]

The popularity speaks for it :) Well done indeed!

[Dom]

This was so nicely written. Your poem was very beautiful and I enjoyed reading it. Good job. :)

[HoorayForUnderdog]

Aw, this is very sweet -- also you have created a nice structure here as well and I always like good balance to a poem -- well done.

[Pickleby Davies]

This is really sweet and how you execute it in such a soft manner is really incredible! Great job!

[Light]

a beautiful love. i should have read the description. as i read this, i thought it seemed very repetitive for a poem. i didn't get it until i realized it was a "song" (kinda). it's gonna be hard for me to describe this because "beautiful" is my favorite word to use...i'll give it a try though. some of the ideas of this conceptualized love are incredible. a love that you knew; past time, and tears, and reason and reality! a "fairytale!" this was beautifully done!

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