elemantal beast

jewel meets her trainers

The room got real quiet when she said that all of sudden the ground shook, fire began to formed in the air, wind blew in all directions, a river formed beside her. then the ground formed up into a rock golem, the fire formed a phoenix, the air swirled into a ball that transformed into a giant bird, the river rosed up and formed a giant serpent.

They all went over to jewel. Jewel was so scared she froze. Then she ran but before she could get away a tail tripped her. She was shaking and felt a wet liquid come out of her. “What is this feeling” she asked fearfully as they got closer to her.

All at once the four creatures said “We  are the elemental beast. We are here to train you and get you a new pair of underwear”. She then asked “what was underwear and why is it that i am in need of a new one”. The water serpent then screamed out loud “what have you been teaching her crystal.” “Do you want the job or not because there are some other elemental beast to choose from”. Jewel was trembling not knowing what is going on.

She looked down at her crouched wondering what it was. Just then someone came up to her. she slowly looked up and saw a giant beak in her face. She jumped back at the sight of it. “We’re not going to hurt you” she notified her. Jewel was alarmed to hear words come out of the birds mouth.  The bird excitedly screeched “my named is Roc of the air i will be one of the four trainers. what do you like to do? what is your favorite color? do you have any…” “ROC!” Crystal Flower boomed all over the room. “SHE ONLY CAME TODAY”. “who r u beast?” jewel requested.

The whole room went quiet. Then the earth elementals vanished. Jewel got scared again. all of a sudden the ground began to shake. Then the rock golem came up out of the ground. Then he made mountains of rock form. He then announce “I’m the rock Golem Magmus” he then made a mountain form and disappeared. a stream of water began to form along the mountain and rose at the end and came out and formed a water serpent “ i am the water serpent Blue” he exclaimed as he formed a sea around the mountain and as it formed a rock formed under Jewel’s feet then he vanished. Then clouds started to form in the air and wind blown in in Roc came in. she formed two tornadoes on the mountains and screeched out “I am Roc ruler of air”. she then vanished. Then fire came from behind the mountain. A phoenix came out and yelled “my name is Fawke”. Then Fawke put his wings together and a burst of fire went out everywhere and no one could see anything. Then all appeared on the mountain when the the light went away. they then announce in a chorus “We are the elementals.” Jewel was surprised at what she saw and felt an urge of power. She realized it came from them.  

They Then vanish again and then out of no where…

Reviews

[matrixmark]

So from the beginning you show a good use of your imaganation by throwing in fire and wind and a giant bird - now that quite a combination.
So as I read on my brows began to arch at the other stuff which you have going on in this piece. Its' one hell of an imaginative piece and full marks to you on that respect. The names you have given to the beasts/monsters and everything else are pretty cool too.

Mark.

[arucard]

i am very imaginative. i want to rewrite this story better but want to know if people would like the plot of it. the names took me a day to come up with along with the beast type. thank u for your review