Sunny Disease

A negative take on Summer-No I do not dislike this particular season. This is just something that wheeled around in my brain so I put it to paper. :D

Sweltering calidity,

Reflection of sun.

Drawing in closer,

Scorching the flesh.

Rising in temperature...

Blacktops… they simmer.

Footsies of young ones,

Blistering at touch.

Demon of Summer,

Star of the day...

Mirroring off irises,

Obscuring the vision.

Short lived beauty ,

Heat grasping throat.

Paralyzing playtime,

Running for air.

Summertime....

Such a glorious sound.

But alas...

Masses be deceived.

This Season…

It is, but a disease.

Author's Note

Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

Reviews

[ManasaC]

I agree... Summer can be raging at times.. But sometimes i favor it than the cold winter. Neverthless i loved this piece...Nice work!!!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[AaronFreitas]

I like the format... love that there's a lot of powerful words that contribute to the meaning of the poem. Doesn't feel forced to me... good flow :) Nice write Briana!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Coyote Poetry]

You gave Summer a bad name. I do dislike heat. Michigan heat ain't so bad. I have lived in the Middle East and Texas/Georgia. Can cook a egg on the hot ground in the middle of Summer. I liked the poem. Honest and direct tone in the words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you :D

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[I Am Svetlana]

I'm not one to dislike the summer season either, but I get tired of it after a short while. There's only so much hot weather I can take. I can understand how many love summer because of the heat and being able to go outdoors a lot. I'm an outdoorsy person as well and love to enjoy the weather, just too much hot wears me out and makes me cranky. Even for a young person, it has it's effects on me.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you for reading :D

[Einstein Noodle]

refreshing take on the sweltering demon ... i grew up in upstate NY and those 90 degree days with humidity off the charts were killers .. we use to pop tar blisters in the road on those days .. i can still smell the black top .. not to mention cancer rays from space ;)
E.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Alfred Kukitz]

Only in a sense, here in Pennsylvania, of bugs, ticks and humidity. When they dance with a 66 year old man I tend to never find the rhythm. Thanks Briana!

Regards,
Al

[Briana O'Connor]

lmao thanks for reading

[Rana]

Haha, this was quite dramatic. You've had some fun with the words and have surely brought out a hot picture of what summer could be at it's worst. Specially loved the 5th stanza. Tiny little enjoyable piece!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Jesse]

Hmm, has that Mad Max World kind of feel to it. Liked it!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Rajat malik]

I liked it....but I love winter more....

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you for reading :D

[Dayran]

A memory of summer ... and the real thing ... in these times can be different. Its the nature of the person experiencing it. Makes us wonder who we were before?

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you for reading :D