Wrong Direction

Wrong Direction

A Poem by Briana O'Connor

Lacking return

This bitter sweet love

Enslaving her spirit

Stealing self control


Helpless in nature, she’s begging for more


Broken is the heart

Obsessive is the mind

Changing her from woman

To dotish little girl


She’s stuck, glued to the floor


Begging for relief

Longing for his touch

Confused in mentality

Foolish with her gifts


She’s giving, losing self respect


Affection, she’s seeking

Attention of wrong sort

A lesson unlearned

This pursuit of devotion


She seeks self esteem from other imperfect souls


Lacking perspective

She fails to comprehend

This feeling so longed for

Is right within reach


If only she’d grasp it, and hand it to herself

© 2015 Briana O'Connor


Author's Note

Briana O'Connor
Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

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Wise writing. Until we are complete on our own - no one's approval will make us complete.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Very, very realistic. The hidden war within that most people don't realize they are a part of.

Posted 9 Years Ago


That's the spirit Brianna hand it to yourself, after all, you are in charge.

Regards,
Al

Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

Thank you for reading :D
Looking and searching for that acknowledgement is always a journey and a long one.



Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

Thank you for reading :D
This poem couldnt have been more relatable. We seek people's attention in the wrong ways to fill a void, and it's quite sad really

Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

Thank you for reading :D
Broken is the heart
Obsessive is the mind
Changing her from woman
To dotish little girl... Liked it!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

thank you :D
Brittney: I loved it...it's about every girl I've ever known, little snapshots here and there. I've been there before...everybody wants to be beautiful...somebody tell us we are. We cling to the wrong things, but that's life and we learn. No? You, my dear, are a talented writer. So many emotions and compelling imagery it radiates:
She’s giving, losing self respect
Affection, she’s seeking
Attention of wrong sort
A lesson unlearned
This pursuit of devotion
Like I said: You ROAR!!! Thank you so much....Dale

She seeks self esteem from other imperfect souls


Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much :D I really appreciate the positive review. I am often down on myself and this hel.. read more
Confuser

9 Years Ago

You're welcome, and writing is good for our spirit. Thanks too!
The BadBoy image always seems so compelling...

Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

lol that it does
Chris

9 Years Ago

Do you think most women go into it with the thought of changing the bad out of the boy? And if they.. read more
Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

I have no idea lol. For some reason women are naturally fixers, but I have learned that it is not my.. read more
Perhaps its saying to stop seeking ... and find a way to give it to yourself. Well put ...

Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

thank you for reading :D
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A very strong and heartfelt message throughout this darling of a poem. Loved the title also. :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

Thank you :D

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Briana O'Connor
Briana O'Connor

indianapolis, IN



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