Liquid Shackles

Answer to the poems full of pain challenge-Suggestions for title welcomed and appreciated.

Liquor of my demise,

Thief of morals, assassin of dreams

Capturing me with talons

Of sweet, demon like nectar

Depriving lungs of airflow  

As it strangles relentlessly

Racing through my bloodstream

Spreading poison of gold

Devouring all senses

Depleting self control

Mutating my heart

To a tornado like pit

Body forsaking me

No longer am I me

Destruction is my target,

To my body, to my soul

No one is safe here

There’s no shield you can bare

I’m raging in a malady

With no mercy, no morals

Psychosis has engulfed me

With a leash, meager and taut

Alcohol is my master

And I am it’s slave

Author's Note

Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

Reviews

[Briana O'Connor]

I think the title is most excellent! I think it is well written and it pulls the reader in to take that drink and feel the misery... Great Job!!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you very much :D

[Alfred Kukitz]

Title: The Binge

I drink a little bourbon once in a while. Maybe try drinking you don't like, just a little.

Regards,
Al

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you for taking the time to read :D

[Mayank]

I liked the title. That's what made to read the poem, because shackles are unbreakable and if they are made up of liquid you can smash them! The image came up and there I stopped. Yeah, alcohol my savior. I loved your work, that was the phase I lived once. Now, I am moderate drinker.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you for taking the time to read and sharing your perspective :D

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

Descriptive, honest and powerful. Well done.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Odette Ntambara]

detailed, precise, honest and send a message of literary "alcohol is bad for you" I like it a lot. powerful words and impactful(at least for me) I now feel a little guilty for doing this to my body haha

[Briana O'Connor]

lol thank you for taking the time to read!

[MomzillaNC]

A well penned telling of that loss of self that comes with over indulgence.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[MomzillaNC]

yw :)

[Rocans]

I thoroughly enjoyed this. You were very articulate in your description of what liquor does to you. My favourite lines had to be your first two...A poem very well penned A witty title would be " Spirit Slave"

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Jamestown]

Absolutely fantastic piece of work and very powerful message!
Going to my favorites! Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you very much :D

[Mila]

A great poem with a very deep message. The passion in this was impeccable, thank you for sending me this, it was a great read!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you very much :D

[Leslie Philibert]

This is a poem with strength and passion, full of energy, and with exactly the right moral line..great.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D