Vitality of a Leaf

Vitality of a Leaf

A Poem by Briana O'Connor
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answer to leaf challenge

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In the wind they fly without destination,

Dancing with a spirit so free and simplistic.


Resting on grasslands and cobblestone paths,

Piling like hilltops of kaleidoscopic shades.


Beaming tones of auburn, glistening with gold,

They showcase a rainbow of colors so pure.


Their texture spreads music beneath wandering feet,

Crunching with a pulse to the drumming of a snare.


These beauties of nature, so careless to troubles,

Falling from trees with new journeys each moment.

© 2015 Briana O'Connor


Author's Note

Briana O'Connor
Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

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The simplicity is just amazing...gud work...

Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

thank you :D
that's a simply marvelous poem Brianna, your writing always amazes me and this is remarkable because of the simplicity of the subject made fantastic by your wording and design, beautiful :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much :D
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Hey love the colours you put in my mind

Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

Thank you :D
this is wonderful........
small, beautiful, crunchy,full of vitality : LEAF!

Thorough description!!!
i loved it!!!
:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much :D
Pushkar Prabhat

9 Years Ago

you are welcome................. :) :)
Wow! I read it many time; and each time the view I have in mind is different. Thank you for this wonderful piece :) Sorry, I haven't found any criticism to provide you with. It was crystal clear :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much. No need to apologize! I like it when there's not criticism to provide :P
hi... I really like this piece... I do have a suggestion although you know how you want it to read.. As I read it out loud... the first line: In the wind they fly without a destination,.... the word (a) makes it pause or bumpy and if you omit it... it flows really nice.. like :In the wind they fly without destination,... but its just a suggestion... I applaud your ability...

Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much. I like that suggestion. I shall change it!

9 Years Ago

you are welcome dear... hope to read more of your writing
i LOVE IT. Thought it was beautiful. Just what I needed. Went outside a moment ago, to find leaves, for a wreath. But the beautiful colors are up high.
Their texture spreads music beneath wandering feet,
Crunching with a pulse to the drumming of a snare.
The descriptions are delightful. I jumped this dawn, walked on the front porch for coffee and leafs crushed beneath my feet; (a snake had been at the edge of our porch last yr) and awhile ago, they were falling like snow with the wind blowing. Thank you. I love nature.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your kind words.
Confuser

9 Years Ago

Y/w..........................................................
Love this line: "Piling like hilltops of kaleidoscopic shades." A great answer to the challenge!



Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

thank you :D
MomzillaNC

9 Years Ago

You're welcome.

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Added on November 17, 2014
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Briana O'Connor
Briana O'Connor

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