Vitality of a Leaf

answer to leaf challenge

In the wind they fly without destination,

Dancing with a spirit so free and simplistic.

Resting on grasslands and cobblestone paths,

Piling like hilltops of kaleidoscopic shades.

Beaming tones of auburn, glistening with gold,

They showcase a rainbow of colors so pure.

Their texture spreads music beneath wandering feet,

Crunching with a pulse to the drumming of a snare.

These beauties of nature, so careless to troubles,

Falling from trees with new journeys each moment.

Author's Note

Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

Reviews

[jennifer little]

wow wonderful poem I enjoyed it keep up the good work and its very imagenery keep writing

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Bluefire]

Dazzling wordplay and imagery.
Well done!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Bluefire]

No problem. ^^

[Rana]

Oh the flow is remarkable.. The sequence in the descriptive narration is perfect.. Totally vivid, the words were so easily able to bring out the images.. Its brief and beautiful..

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Mayank]

"Their texture spreads music beneath wandering feet,
Crunching with a pulse to the drumming of a snare." --- brilliant feeling here, their is softness and wonderful imagery

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[PloughBoy]

Eloquently worded, beautifully depicted free verse poetry ... I thoroughly enjoyed this visual romp through leaf-strewn, cobblestone streets, Briana...

Stunning presentation, and very well executed.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Troy Henson]

Can this depict a way of life for us all? We fall but we rise and keeping moving on...no matter what the situation. I do the love the softness of the imagery in this and how each word carries the next. Such a warm piece.

Troy

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[PloughBoy]

It was entirely my pleasure. :}

[realmwriter]

I have no criticism to offer. I love it. Love that you capture all the colors of a leaf without actually using the names of the colors. Love the reference to the crunch of dried leaves sounding like a snare drum. Great write my friend.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you very much for your kind words :D always glad when I can scribe a piece that does not inspire criticism :P

[realmwriter]

Criticism is for poetry or people that need correction. This needed none. You are most welcome.

[RAOrourke]

Briana-Such a great job-the beautifulness of your words and descriptions are superb!! Resting on grasslands and cobblestone paths,
Piling like hilltops of kaleidoscopic shades....wonderful imagery!
Another great job!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Dayran]

Fallen and yet not lost its lustre ...a great message of continuity of life's purpose. Nice ...

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[hardeep sabharwal]

Very fine, autumn is described well, very nicely written
Thankyou for sharing

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D